Feb 20, 2026
First of all… thank “you” for this beautiful story. I'm happy to hear that my comments meant something to you.
What I wanted to say is that there's a clear difference between this and your previous works. If I had to explain it in an analogy: this story was structured like a movie. The pacing, the cinematic beats, the small cast, the focused character arcs, one main plot taking up all the screen time… that's why the pacing works and why I kept saying it felt like watching a good movie.
Your other stories, like Neko Tokyo and Hooves and Wine, read more like a series: side plots, side characters, mini arcs within one volume. That's not to say which is better or worse, just different approaches. But this one? I feel that if it were adapted, it would absolutely be a movie.
I also really admire that you wrote this in such a short time. That says a lot about your talent. I can't wait to read your new romcom next… I'll be there for it.
If I had one tiny critique: I do feel like the original prompt's spotlight didn't get quite enough focus. But honestly? The story you wrote instead was so strong that I barely noticed until I thought about it afterward.
Really beautiful work. Don't doubt it. 
