May 15, 2025
Hmm... I'll have to say the chapters after departing with Amir have been sagging a fair bit. My issue is that I think the connective tissue between chapters is a little sparse. There is, I feel, a big gap between events, which is not necessarily temporal so much as logical. In a way, whilst I can appreciate the chronology of what I'm reading, it also feels like the story leaps at times, rather than flow. It also doesn't help that a lot of the plot beats don't feel clearly directed. We were in Darkmoor earlier, now we're headed to Zarina - I don't think any of these places got that much of a signposting before their reveal. We were told they're a thing as we saw them, making the journey feel anything but directed; if that was the intention, however, I'll say that it doesn't feel all that intentional. Rather, it's like the plot is unravelling a little bit. Sagging, as it were.
One suggestion here would be to up the ante a slight bit. But I have a feeling that will happen in the next chapter. If not, this criticism and advice will carry over. :D
