May 27, 2025
The boy was born in the literal city of dreams...
One small note: you don't need to be this specific with your descriptions. Often times you sneak in details like 'about seven minutes' or 'a metre of space', which have the side effect of breaking the immersion of the surrounding snippet. Granted, your 'essaylike' writing as you so dutifully claimed it doesn't particularly concern itself with a sense of atmosphere - which isn't a demerit, rather an observation. Still, it would likely benefit you to be a little more literary about these things. A metre's distance can be an arm's length; seven minutes can be a couple minutes or a short while.
