Feb 23, 2025
Now imagine if he ran into a car with a manual gearbox. The clutch would've fallen off before the first mile.
In other, more literary relevant news. I won't really dig into the comedy and why it doesn't work for me, I'll just let it be different strokes for different folks. However, on a structural level, I think that this story lacks a certain oomph. You can argue that it *is* a comedy and it is supposed to be nonsensical, aimless and what-not, but to that I'll fire back that: cause and effect still matters to the reader. So far, we don't have too much of that. It's mostly a series of events that kind of just happen.
Now that would be fine if we had a kind of goal to pursue, but that's also absent. Sure, Rom wants to find a way to fuel he and Eddy's generator, but the issue is that Rom is also a fairly passive character, reliant on Eddy to do everything. To that end, since Eddy is mostly just comic relief (at least for now), it feels like the characters aren't progressing the story forward; rather, the story just advances past the characters and they're supposed to deal with it. I suppose it makes for funny hijinks, but it doesn't really pique my interest.
Best of luck in the contest,
Bubbles~
