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Nov 20, 2025

Begging for this to be yuri.

Touch of the Tainted

Chapter:0

Nov 19, 2025

This is all cool and all, but so far we've had 3 chapters of combat that didn't exactly have a purpose or any narrative weight to it. *Why* do we want to see these people fighting, other than them being protagonists? What makes them special on a personal level? Why should I be invested in the consequence of a fight that feels quite one-sided?

The Blessing of Diva: Resonance Zero

Chapter:2

Nov 19, 2025

Why is this written like a screenplay? You're writing a book not directing a film.

The Blessing of Diva: Resonance Zero

Chapter:0

Nov 10, 2025

Wild to think this is the ending.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:45

Nov 10, 2025

Nitpick, but it does feel like you have an overreliance on a certain prosaic trick. A lot of the time, when you're strapped for rhythm, you fall back on the same structure: "I did this, verbing that, [while this other thing happened], [verbing another thing]." It would be invisible if it didn't happen in close succession, but it happens often enough to be not only noticeable, but distractingly so.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:38

Nov 09, 2025

What was that last question, what? Who is we here?

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:32

Nov 09, 2025

Finally. Took us 30 chapters, but we're finally isekai-ing, MagiRevo style.

Also is Rose's 'domain' an Echidna from Re:Zero reference?

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:30

Nov 09, 2025

Oh lol, Soulsleep makes the magisoul sleep. Duhhh.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:29

Nov 08, 2025

To:Edenstudent

It was an Undertale reference.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:12

Nov 07, 2025

It's you. After all this time, it's still you.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:12

Nov 07, 2025

Some of these chapters feel quite oddly trimmed. I'm not saying they all ought to end in cliffhangers, but sometimes I can't help wondering if you just structured this as a bigger chapter comprising multiple scenes and you just fit as many of those as you could in the 1-2k range.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:11

Nov 07, 2025

Y'know, I'm kinda wondering where the fact that this guy has been isekai'd comes in. If I omit the bit at the beginning which provides us with the necessary context that Hikaru died, this reads like a classic YA fantasy with LN prose.

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>FORBIDDIC< I Got Reincarnated Into A World Where I Was Forbidden From Learning About Magic But I Will Persist

Chapter:9

Nov 06, 2025

To:Lucy

Y'know, I was gonna let this slide, but now that you said stuff like "I wrote this only for you," I couldn't help it.

I couldn't help noticing a marked departure from the writing style of your earlier chapters starting here. And whilst that baffled me at first, seeing how consistent, rigid and, most importantly of all, soulless the writing has become after this point (I did read a couple more chapters just to confirm my doubts) it has become blatantly apparent to me that this chapter in particular has either been written or polished with the help of AI. Otherwise I can't explain how your tight writing has suddenly become bloated, why em-dashes suddenly abound, and why the otherwise fairly coherent narrative now feels jerky and unfocused.

I'm happy I could motivate you, though. You do have some good writing chops on you. I just wish you'd used them to the fullest extent rather than taking the easy out. I'd also be happy to be proven wrong, but I am fairly certain there is no way for you to do that.

Good day.

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A True Hero's form

Chapter:17

Nov 04, 2025

Swear to god if you're not the least bit trans I'll eat my shoe.

Grabby with Lilly and Zenobia

Warning: This SpellBook Was Human!

Chapter:10

Nov 01, 2025

I am lowkey confused by this chapter. Not two paragraphs ago, Lian just lied about his power. Then he did... I'll be honest, I have no clue what he did to that demon, or why the three of them were even here to begin with. Then he's suddenly fine revealing it to the world?

Also, I feel like for the past couple of chapters you've really started ditching the setup phase of your chapters. In the earlier, and I assume, more polished chapters, there was a distinct ebb into the narrative, silly and sudden as it might've been. But now, it feels like I'm just jerked into it like the reverse of waking from a nightmare.

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A True Hero's form

Chapter:17