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Feb 19, 2025

To:Ashley

They're in Japan, so starting high school is 15-16. Her 'job' is not really a job; she has an unofficial pet grooming salon in the back of her father's veterinary clinic, which some of her dad's patients use (and spread the word of mouth about).

As for 'crack a window', that's not a localised saying, so I don't know what to make of that comment.

I'm In Love With My Catgirl Classmate, But If She Meows at Me One More Time, I Will Lose It!!!

Chapter:1

Feb 18, 2025

Waiting for some boundaries to be crossed that aren't technological, physiological, biological, morphological or sexualogical. Amazingogical.

The Darc: OS

Chapter:4

Feb 18, 2025

Frank Herbert would like a couple words.

The Darc: OS

Chapter:3

Feb 18, 2025

I feel like the dialogue and the narration are such a stark dichotomy: one flows seamlessly, the other hobbles along. It's very jarring to go from smooth, hollywoodesque lines to descriptions that feel stitched together, or throwaway lines that seem to be tacked on to succour the need for *something* - not anything concrete, just *something*. Feels like you could really dial up the dialogues :D Make them take charge of the story a bit more.

The Darc: OS

Chapter:2

Feb 18, 2025

Interesting start. You describe things in a very brisk and vivid fashion, albeit a little vague at times. The beginning, for instance, was a little bit esoteric, and I feel like some more specificity could've worked in your favour - though I can appreciate that the idea was to put the reader in Sam's shoes, where everything is 'shadows and noise' until she figures out her situation.

The pacing was also a bit touch and go; again, I can appreciate wanting to convey chaos, but that doesn't need to come from jerky storytelling. Panic and stress can come across with more polished prose too.

On a non-critiquey note... please tell me she doesn't end up hooking up with a creature...

The Darc: OS

Chapter:1

Feb 18, 2025

Off-topic, but it would be really cool if one of the Eclipsed Dawn people would be suffering from cancer or leukemia or some kind of terminal illness that'd make them be dead shortly after the comet or something. Not for any plot reason, but it's kind of vanitas vanitatum, and Eclipsed Dawn would be their make-a-wish. Plus, the end of the world would be a great equalizer. No death is sad when you're all gonna die.

Eclipsed Dawn: Which will be your last song?

Chapter:2

Feb 18, 2025

Mirror scene...

Eclipsed Dawn: Which will be your last song?

Chapter:1

Feb 18, 2025

Reminds me of that one Powerpuff Girls episode where the girls sang a song and restored colour to the world.

Eclipsed Dawn: Which will be your last song?

Chapter:0

Feb 18, 2025

I get that English is probably your second language, but this book reads as if you're using a thesaurus to find synonyms. A lot of the turns of phrase are unnatural: calling a phone a gadget, for instance. If you're at a loss for words, rephrase, don't reach for synonyms.

Zombie Harem with a System

Chapter:2

Feb 18, 2025

I love how my guy said that after protecting the love of his life, he went to his girlfriend. He's so sexful that he can copulate with invisible women.

Zombie Harem with a System

Chapter:1

Feb 18, 2025

To:Lihinel

Nyanko

I'm In Love With My Catgirl Classmate, But If She Meows at Me One More Time, I Will Lose It!!!

Chapter:1

Feb 18, 2025

To:Ashley

>:(

I'm In Love With My Catgirl Classmate, But If She Meows at Me One More Time, I Will Lose It!!!

Chapter:1

Feb 17, 2025

To:lolitroy

hang

I'm In Love With My Catgirl Classmate, But If She Meows at Me One More Time, I Will Lose It!!!

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2025

Did not commit to the middle english bit either. Half-baked, tsk. That ain't gonna win you anything.

Of Love and Liberation - to change þis rotten world wiþ þee [volume 1]

Chapter:1

Feb 16, 2025

Should've thought in Scots too. Commit to the bit, pussy. Waiting for the reply in T-10 secs

Of Love and Liberation - to change þis rotten world wiþ þee [volume 1]

Chapter:0

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