Jun 08, 2023
I want the romance nao!!!
Jk, I love how grounded your story feels. I feel it's a really cool perspective of a sports athlete. So unlike most sports manga/anime where it's almost always either
a) guy who doesn't know the sport ends up being good at it
b) guy who's really good transfers to a new school/revives a dying team
I really like yours. Takashi and Takachiho feels realistic, and not like the millionth underdog kind of story. Which makes sense, since this is a romance more than sports lol
But yeah...I know it's coming, but I really wanna see more romance T _ T
Don't get me wrong, your writing is nice, I just think that romance readers might be looking for a better sense of romantic progression at he start. We're 5 chapters in (including the prologue), and it still feels a bit too sports heavy, Takashi and Nao feel like they've only just met, and I'm struggling to see those "sparks", besides the standard nervousness of a teenage boy who's around a girl.
But yeah, hopefully you'll prove me wrong and blow my mind with how the romance develops soon. Maybe this is "Our Greatest Comeback" jkjk
Looking forward to see where this goes next!