Oct 14, 2023
I don't want to be rude but you really need to reformat and proofread this.
There are no spaces between the paragraphs which makes it extremely hard to read in parts and is an eyesore. The usage of commas and full stops is also pretty offputting, which exacerbates this issue. This is not even to mention things like the repatative nature of the language; you start a lot of consecutive sentences with 'I' in an unnatural way that really should either be rephrased or combined into slightly longer but ultimately more concise lines.
I'm not one to comment often but I felt I had to here because it's hard to even evaluate your entry when it is hard to read in the very basic sense, and because this could so easily be fixed with some kind of free AI tool.
