Mar 27, 2022
All work done by you eh? Does that include ODST's cover?
I'm only kidding. I know you meant the actual writing. Though, I would be careful using an image like that and saying 'all work' was done by you. It probably breaks some copyright laws somewhere or at the very least Honeyfeed's terms of use.
Now, I did actually read the chapter. And I hope you don't mind, but I wanted to share my thoughts on it.
You've got an interesting set up, though it could get rather boring if Liam stays the only character.
However, the start is rather inconsitant and confusing. I thought Liam couldn't move because of his armour? But he got up. I thought he wasn't sure if he was the only survivor or if the others just landed somewhere else? But at the end it states 'he was the only unit of his squad left alive...'
Also, if his mission is to reclaim Earth, why would NSA send such a small squad?
Also, just using 'The A.I.' again and again gets a but confusing.
All that said. I did actually enjoy myself while reading this and I think I'll continue reading. Later though. I should've been alseep hours ago.
