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This is the former home of some of my novels, you can find them these days over on RoyalRoad!

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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Aug 05, 2022

I'm back at last, this one fell down my list a bit but good to finally get to it.

The premise here is full of intrigue, amnesia, Zain's potential and the competition itself - This looks like a heck of ride to come😄👍

Red-Black Course

Chapter:2

Aug 04, 2022

Damn man, it's just great chapter after chapter - The rain and tension of this scene paint such a picture - Your writing has really come such a long way since march, the improvements are awesome😄😎😊👍

Challengers

Chapter:19

Aug 04, 2022

I'm torn between Indiana-Jim and ma girl Akio for best character position 😄

Challengers

Chapter:18

Aug 03, 2022

Ominus final line - Do I sense finale set-up in the works?😅👍

My Childhood Best Friend is a VTuber! (OsananaV)

Chapter:36

Aug 03, 2022

To:muishiki

No worries we are all rookies on the site - Happy to help😊👍

Unconsciously [SHORT]

Chapter:6

Aug 02, 2022

Ho-ho, a love triangle perhaps?😄

Also, I wonder if main girl's countryside upbringing affects her views - She seems very.... 'alert'(?) To even the minorest suggestion of lesbiens, which is strange considering the day & age we live in😅 - Guess farm life has left it's influence 😂.

Unconsciously [SHORT]

Chapter:7

Aug 02, 2022

I'm a bit mixed on the amount of Japanese you use - It'd be one thing if it were for speicifc regional characters - But that fact multiple girls use words like 'Ara' & 'Jaa' is a bit distracting.

A character's voice is as important as their physical description - With all characters sometimes using those rather jarring words, it means sentances often lose their identity 👍👍.

Spider stuff was quite tho😄👍.

Unconsciously [SHORT]

Chapter:6

Aug 01, 2022

Ouch, that dig on American comics is gonna need some first aid😅

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:15

Jul 31, 2022

The butler's name.... Is butler? Dang, that was a hard read by his parents at birth😅

Reborn as a Petite Girl’s Teddy

Chapter:1

Jul 31, 2022

God damn, bringing back the Christmas story, talk about cheecky😂😉 - I love the use of it😄

FICTION: If you held the power of god in your two hands, would you save the world? Would you doom it? Or would you watch from the sidelines, just as you had done before?

Chapter:6

Jul 31, 2022

Lots of short chapters in a row, nice for catching up😂.

Gotta say, I appreciate a coincidence, all plots need a few - But throwing the dangerous peice of paper on the floor is a bit much😅, I feel Endra would demand to have it back so she could destroy the evidence😂😅