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Lucianael

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Aug 29, 2022

is the title a reverence?

Machine Heart

Chapter:20

Aug 25, 2022

that was quite lengthy. I think this was the best chapter this far. keep it up

Machine Heart

Chapter:18

Aug 25, 2022

I'm the honey feed moderator and here to tell you that selling your products under my novel will be punished with 10 years inprisonment as long as you dont give me 50% of on a legendary hero

Isekai Any%

Chapter:0

Aug 25, 2022

To:Goncalo 1234

No, its just that i noticed a lot of problems i made when i started writing my first few chapters, i would maybe go over the first few chapters when you have around 30k words written you should be able to easily find most of the small problems and give your novel a bit more polish

The Doll Metaphor Part 1

Chapter:1

Aug 25, 2022

Good start, it was really emersive mainly because its just so much more relateable then your typical op mc

The Arbiter

Chapter:1

Aug 25, 2022

Correct me if I'm wrong, but you aren't a native speaker, are you?

The Doll Metaphor Part 1

Chapter:1

Aug 25, 2022

well that was ehm... interessting

The Doll Metaphor Part 1

Chapter:0

Aug 24, 2022

Im sorry, i didnt know that they had a channel for that, sorry for bothering you and thx for telling me.

Machine Heart

Chapter:16

Aug 21, 2022

Hey cora, are you allready done with all chapters up until now? if yes, got any opinions on the plot this far?

A Place between There and Now

Chapter:29

Aug 21, 2022

To:Cora

you win some you lose some, shouldnt be to big of a problem

Machine Heart

Chapter:3

Aug 21, 2022

You go way more in detail, it makes it more imersive and single scenes and inviroments more imaginable

Machine Heart

Chapter:5

Aug 21, 2022

i think its noticable that you got a lot better over the first few chapters, this pne reads a lot better then the first for example

Machine Heart

Chapter:4

Aug 21, 2022

Cool twist though i would maybe change the name a little bit from KILLER-111 to something like Killer_Unit-111. I just think that KILLER sounds a bit edgy

Machine Heart

Chapter:3

Aug 21, 2022

To:Cora

I had and probably still have a similar problem with my book. While I corrected the first 5 chapters or so there are still a ton of mistakes in chapters 6-10 that im just to tired to fix right now

Machine Heart

Chapter:1

Aug 21, 2022

I would change how you start a few of the sentence, i think you used "The men" four times and "The boy" 2 times. A total of 9 sentence also start with the, if that was deliberate and i just missed something im sorry, but it makes it sound kinda stiff.

Machine Heart

Chapter:2

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