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Xiellion

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One-third author, one-third gym rat, one-third med student.

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Jul 26, 2022

TALL PAMPERING CAT MOMMY YES YES YES YES YES THIS IS IT

excuse my neurons

Idolatry

Chapter:15

Jul 26, 2022

I'm getting the ara ara vibes from the new character....❤️

I like the effort you put into combining dialogue with actions, they're quite small, yet meaningful details.

Idolatry

Chapter:14

Jul 26, 2022

Lily's got those cold femdom vibes ngl, enough to fit as the ideal woman of a masochist. You could say her personality is actually as crazy as Amy's.

Being her brother must be 😎💀

Idolatry

Chapter:13

Jul 26, 2022

The tensions seem to be rising here, everyone is taking things more seriously.

Lily pressures herself to contemplate on the best possible actions, all while trying to sort out her own emotions. Amy is pretty much willing to help, but feels rather conflicted, and she is starting to break character.

The psychological development on these two is impressive so far.

Idolatry

Chapter:12

Jul 26, 2022

Nice touch on some of the world-building going on, especially when they were explaining about the underground areas and citizens and how they're being exploited by NorCo.

I acknowledge the details on body language through all of the characters in this chapter and how they react during interactions, which really utilizes the "show" aspect of things.

Idolatry

Chapter:10

Jul 26, 2022

"My old enemy, stairs." - Po

Idolatry

Chapter:9

Jul 26, 2022

Charisma 100

Idolatry

Chapter:8

Jul 26, 2022

To:Xiellion

Also that fight scene was badass...

Idolatry

Chapter:7

Jul 26, 2022

Someone mentioned the story being "all over the place". I'm not sure what it means but I'l interpret it. There isn't a clear objective or plotline in the story so far and it doesn't seem to be developing towards a certain direction, but that's fine by me.

I would say that the chapters up till this one don't focus on plot, rather it focuses on introducing Amy as a person, her capabilities and her relationships. Kind of like a daily life vlog or something.

Now that we are familiar with Amy, I would assume that from now on, there's going to be some major plot development from here on out.

Idolatry

Chapter:7

Jul 26, 2022

A rather prim and proper party between high class folk, WITH SOME BANGER MUSIC FROM AMY OF COURSE!

Sad to see it was interrupted, but I'm excited to see some action.

Idolatry

Chapter:6

Jul 26, 2022

Can-people has to definitely be one of the most random ways to call a playboy.

Lily and Richard seem to converse so well with each other despite talking for the first time, interesting development.

I think I get what you said earlier, about Amy's job not being explicitly stated, which shows how much she cares little about it.

"some cheap-up text (her) learned" 😅

Idolatry

Chapter:5

Jul 26, 2022

To:Dracors

It would be funnier if it was an actual horse, but I thought it was unrealistic in a zombie apocalypse.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:4

Jul 26, 2022

To:Dracors

I'm glad you appreciate fedoras 😁

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:2

Jul 26, 2022

This might need some edits...like "Heh! Roget that!"

I'm quite curious on how to change a guy's preferences....like do you mean deconverting a gay person? Such power Amy has.....

I also get this feeling that Lily's preferences in men seem to fit Hazel's description.

I like Amy's interactions with Lily, I can see how they're both best friends who care about each other. They have such good vibes together, it's heartwarming.

Idolatry

Chapter:4

Jul 26, 2022

To:Deleted User

I still find it surprising that you're able to reach my novel at the speed of light 😅

Ori has the worst luck when it comes to guys.....

Who knows what her last two boyfriends are capable of......

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:8

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