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Xiellion

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The webnovel author who decided he was going to write "fun".

registered at: Jun 06, 2022

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Jul 25, 2022

There's definitely something strange going on with Rin. I wonder if it has something to do with her past in the city......

Looking forward to the fight scenes!

The Dusk of Revenge

Chapter:9

Jul 25, 2022

I love how funny the dialogue is between Ai and Asahi. I hope we can see more interesting interactions like this.

The Dusk of Revenge

Chapter:8

Jul 24, 2022

Not gonna lie, it feels like you're putting too much details and explanations to things. The story feels too slow and dragging in my opinion.

Try to make things brief and concise to keep the reader's attention, but that's just a suggestion.

The Dusk of Revenge

Chapter:7

Jul 24, 2022

Is this Hackerman a genius? Being able to hack stealthily while talking to two different people at the same time is impressive. This man must have crazy multitasking skills.

The Dusk of Revenge

Chapter:6

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

I wouldn't mind being criticized, but I'm glad to hear you're enjoying the story the way it is.

I overthink too much 😂

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:5

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

Actually, that's kind of why I've written his name as "Perci" instead of "Percy". The Percy Jackson series was the reason why I started getting into reading, so I guess this is kind of a tribute to that. I'm glad to hear someone knows about it.

As for Ori....she did treat Perci's wound with her medical expertise, so I'll count that as a good thing. But let's just wait and see what happens next...

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:6

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

In the middle of the zombie apocalypse, there are no laws, so you can pretty much do whatever the hell you want, screw morals, survival of the fittest, that sort of thing. So rape is an option.

Also, the 7 ex-boyfriends are pretty much meant to have some sort of crazy flaw anyway, for entertainment purposes of course. It's pretty much why she's broken up with everyone of them, the poor girl.

Don't worry, I don't think Dustin is a nice guy. The story is meant to show what an actual nice guy should be like anyway.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:5

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

Well, if I were to defend Robin's case, he could always take the arrows back from the floor. And yep, he's extremely desperate to get Ori back. Ya know, being super possessive and selfish and all.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:4

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

Welp, teenagers can be quite irrational, the human brain doesn't fully develop till age 25.

I'm glad that you're able to create such deep analytical insights about the plot that I haven't really thought about, I appreciate that. Goes to show I still have a lot to learn.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:3

Jul 24, 2022

Well I would think it depends on the type of bruise, I don't want to get nerdy but basically the injury on her thigh affects the ability to flex her knee (I had to do some research before writing since I've doubted it as well).

As for why everyone hates her, I can't say anything right now.

I'm not sure which person you're referring to when you say pity-beggar Sue tho, hehe.

I'd admit though, it sounds kind of overreactive for everyone to be caring about such things...

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:2

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

I'm pretty edgy if I do say so myself. I like sharp things, like um...French fries and the chocolate tips of ice cream 😎🤬

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:1

Jul 24, 2022

To:Deleted User

Yeah, it's kind of ironic, there's actually a lot of "nice" guys like this according to stories I've heard from women. I'm hoping they aren't too common to society.

Someday, someone's going to prove the girl wrong 👀

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:0

Jul 24, 2022

To:Koyomi

Thanks, didn't think anyone would emphasize that line, I'm glad it sounded funnier than I thought it would be.

Gentleman of the Apocalypse

Chapter:0

Jul 24, 2022

As of this moment, this is the latest chapter so I can tell you my insights in simple form.

1. The story is good, keep it up.
2. Grammar needs work, but I'm sure you'll improve overtime.
3. The placements of commas and periods are a little off at times, might need to learn how to use them effectively.
4. You forget to caps sometimes.
5. Many characters are left undescribed, like Aunty and cousin and some students.

I won't mention it again cuz it might be annoying for you 😅

Sharply Cold at Zone

Chapter:11

Jul 24, 2022

I like him, he fights with clever tactics rather than pure strength and fighting skill.

Sharply Cold at Zone

Chapter:10

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