Aug 12, 2023
I doubt anyone would go for shield cuz it's boring but ig that's just me lol.
This first chapter certainly is chaotic lol. But ig there was a lot of information to disclose, and it's easy to read so I wouldn't say it's much of a problem.
One thing though, I think you should be a little bit more subtle when the mc's thinking eternally. For example if he has the intention to do something or if he's feeling something, in this case it's not very nice to just write what he's thinking literally since it makes reading it more bland. Hope that helps.