Jun 18, 2023
To:Bubbles
Thank you for the comment.
For where this is going, It's inexcusable to make people wait so long for the point of the story. Even if everything comes back around to relevance, it really isn't an excuse.
As for Yuta's personality, the goal was for someone who tries to be charismatic and takes on everyone's problems out of guilt for an event that he hints at in these chapters and reveals in, what I'm believing will be, chapter 18. However, if you have to ask what the hell is this guys personality than I can understand that I failed to make that obvious. The horny shit was also meant to play into another future plot point, but I should have made it obvious sooner.
Thanks for reading this far, at this point I'm just taking notes on everything that needs to be fixed as I move to the finish, but it sucks that I fucked up on the two basic principles of storytelling.