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Mario Nakano 64

It's a me. I'm an aspiring light novel writer hoping to one day see my works in anime form. I hope that my works at least brighten up your day and give you something to look forward to.

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May 18, 2025

To:SilentDeity

Thanks for checking this out. This is 100% a chess story, with chess as the core focus. If you're a fan of the game, feel free to give this a read as I can guarantee most of the games featured in it are peak chess.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:1

May 17, 2025

Author's Commentary #442:

Time to talk about Chapter 442: Destroying delusions.
Not gonna lie, this was a last minute chapter I made, but it is important. More spotlight is shown on the mystery between Chaya and Kaylee, and Mimoko finally realizes how bad Kuon really is thanks to realizing she hit Nyoan. Now in Kuon's defense, she didn't know that was Nyoan she hit. But even if she had or could tell, she still would have slugged her anyway.

This really goes to show how obsessed Kuon really is with Hagemi. She feels that until she can beat Hagemi, Hagemi will forever live rent free in her head. While she has wanted to try and create a scenario like this for some time, it only now became an option for her thanks to a certain mysterious character deciding to aid her. All I'll say in regards to this character is that they were also central to helping Michiko with her plan, meaning they likely have a rating above 3200. With Chihuahua showing that non-maestros could secretly be 3000+ rated players, it really is a mystery as to who this character could be, but perhaps a clue, or even an outright reveal could happen before the 9th round of the tournament.

That's all for this commentary. I hope you enjoyed it.

En Passant Grandmaster

Chapter:442

May 17, 2025

That's it? Welp, review time I guess. One thing this reminds me of is RuriDragon, though instead of a dragon girl, we get catgirl and romance. Two very good things. But before we go any further with the positives, we need to address a huge negative I had with this entire story; I hated that it was mostly written in third person present tense. I said it before, but I'm not the biggest fan of present tense. First person present tense I can handle, but third person present tense... Sorry. Too many times I got so disoriented by the third person present tense to the point where it lessened my enjoyment of reading. Though this is more of a personal thing as it appears present tense is more popular with others. Now with that out of the way, back to the positives.

I was able to catch some of your earlier draft chapters, and I'm really glad you revised the hell out of them because things were looking so bad that it coupled with me not enjoying the present tense format likely would have made me drop the series or give it a 1/5 if I stuck with it, especially after the drugging chapter, so pat yourself on the back for revising things so well. As others have said, the dialogue is one of the story's strong suits, but I also enjoyed the first person present tense chapters. To be honest, I feel those chapters were the ones I was most engaged with as I'm really not exaggerating when I say the third person present tense didn't mesh well with me. This is why I must sadly knock a star from the review. While the story at it's core is a solid romance, the third person present tense broke my immersion far too many times to say I truly enjoyed every bit of this and that it's worthy of a 5/5. I realize this probably is more of a personal thing, but I feel for the sake of the review it would be disingenuous to all if I negated talking about an aspect that hindered my enjoyment of the novel.

That all being said, I have no other issues. It's sad I couldn't enjoy this as much as I could have due to the format, but sometimes that's just how things go. At least the others didn't seem to have the same issue I had with the third person present tense. Congratulations on finishing, and good luck with the contest.

Cat Got My Tongue

Chapter:28

May 17, 2025

To:lolitroy

Thanks for binge reading this. To be honest, while this started off as just a fun little slice of life story with no rhyme or reason, I did start to feel burnout for it after reaching the one-year point in the story, which was also the real-life one-year anniversary of the series. With no contest in sight yet at the time, I was mainly focused on EPGM and Streamer Royale, but then came the Halloween writathon and the contest and tsundere and even Streamer Royale were put on the back burner. What was once a fun way to write holiday chapters quickly became more of a chore, and after Boxing Day, I decided that this was it. Nina and Johan's tale isn't done yet though. They do appear in Streamer Royale and cameo in EPGM, with the chess chapters here being presented there as a television show. Their world is now merged with my main Jouzu-verse meaning they'll now exist in the main world of most of my other works. And while I have ended this series, there is a good chance I might come back to it, as due to it's nature, I could write a new chapter whenever. Once again, thanks for reading this series all the way through. It helped make Nina just a little bit realer, and made me happy to see all those notifications. In fact, it inspired me to write a new chapter for this, so you aren't quite done reading just yet. But still, thanks for reading this. Reading your comments really made me happy and inspired me to breath some new life into this series.