Jul 20, 2021
A found this story so far to be a bit dry and gloomy, compared to the normal use of truck-kun as a meme. It seems like it is going down a dark, tragic path where the MC starts gradually loses what little of his humanity is left. That's fine, if you spent a bit more time dwelling on his situation. But often, it seems like things get a little sidetracked. Especially early on, there's a lot of info being dropped all at once, instead of being woven into the narrative. A little bit more focus and concisive narration would really help this kind of narrative you are trying to build.
