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Jan 11, 2025

To:lolitroy

H-happy birthday!!

(Actual big thanks for reading this thing the whole way through though)

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:50

Jan 11, 2025

“At least be over 6’”

…. Bruh I felt that one

Food Truck in Space

Chapter:17

Jan 09, 2025

S-stealth camo?!?! Masaka……..

(Also you absolute mad lad. 4 days before end of contest.)

Xyrite

Chapter:1

Jan 07, 2025

To:lolitroy

Some birds just can’t be caged—they gotta be out doing Madoka fights, and running from giant monsters

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:44

Jan 06, 2025

To:Pope Evaristus

Next stop: omedetou ending

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:44

Jan 06, 2025

To:lolitroy

Hmm that's an interesting way of looking at it. (In my opinion, they probably wouldn't have entered "here" if "that" had happened.. Because their only connection to this place is because of A in the first place.)

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:44

Jan 05, 2025

The gray-bearded man's opinion, on Alt-Intelligence: "I strongly feel that this is an insult to life itself."

And I Feel Fine

Chapter:21

Jan 05, 2025

To:lolitroy

(Happy, cheery, tonally-inconsistent ED plays during credits)

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:42

Jan 04, 2025

To:kazesenken

I actually realized that last bit is the worst advice I could have given considering the very next chapter hinges on reading each header section to understand what's going on.
... Um. Just forget everything I said just now 😩

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:9

Jan 04, 2025

To:kazesenken

Thanks for reading and commenting Kaze!
They're not actually from outlining--the sections USUALLY separate whole scenes, or smaller 'beats'--but in a few exceptions, such as major info dumps like this chapter, I separate where I feel like there should be small breathers or checkpoints, to stop and ... ehh, 'absorb' the info for lack of a better term.
(For context, the 'Prof explains a logic gate' mini-sections were originally a lot longer and I had wanted to separate that entire giant section into 3 parts, but I ended up compressing parts 2 and 3 into basically one line--and then, I just left the section headings where they were.)
You do raise a great point, however, and even I feel like I went overboard a bit here. I'd actually recommend skipping over the section headings the first time through a chapter--and then going back (only if you feel like it, of course), to read the section headings that sum up each mini-section.

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:9

Jan 04, 2025

Now that’s some nice 2025 era slang. No cap

“All natural laws would only exist with our consent”
Bro sounding like Judge Holden fr 💀

And I Feel Fine

Chapter:19

Jan 03, 2025

I really, reeaaaally like the way you chain subordinate clauses to extend sentences. You've really achieved that perfect rhythmic, hypnotic cadence. The third paragraph being a prime example.

Obviously the Alt-I stuff rings heavy in this day and age, for obvious reasons--but I think even before AI started to take off, the antecedent notions could be seen in movies, music, books designed by committee--big budget works designed solely to appeal to please as many people as possible, and to offend as FEW people as possible. On paper, they're perfect! ... And now with AI, you don't need an entire committee of very, very smart people to churn out the most lukewarm, polished media. Anyone can do it!
And then like you said, the pendulum DOES swing back. I think we're going to find that we're going to yearn for those rough spots, those imperfections. When's everything's perfect, everything smoothed over and sanded down--well, now you've also sanded off every bit of personality a work might've had.

I am SO sorry for this longpost. But this chapter really got me thinking.

(Next to the ghost of Franky Foo, not pictured: Anakin Skywalker--Hayden Christensen variant; Yoda; Obi-Wan Kenobi)

And I Feel Fine

Chapter:16

Jan 03, 2025

B-boob s-size!? Th-that's lewd! 😳

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:38

Jan 03, 2025

To:Slow

That’s supposed to be Anemone 🙂

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:24

Jan 02, 2025

To:IchigoParfait

Thank you for reading Ichigo! I am definitely always struggling with exposition balance. 😅
I’m glad you like the characters. Thanks for commenting 🙂

Usagi Days (Space Orcs Destroyed the Earth So Let's Deliver Packages in a Pink Kei-Car)

Chapter:1

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