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Paul Losonso

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📚 Writer | Storyteller | Observer of the quietly strange. Sharing fiction, fragments, & thoughts on the creative life.

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Oct 11, 2025

I liked the hook at the very end of the chapter! 👍🏻
Although not being able to logout could potentially be a "dream come true" for many gamers, I get that this unprecedented event could, obviously, prove quite dangerous for the characters we follow 🎮

Cyanic Odyssey

Chapter:2

Oct 11, 2025

I like how the story progresses.
An obstacle here was necessary so we don't thing that everything rolls nice and dandy 👍

Too bad for Bucephalus... but how else could it happen.
Character's reaction etc. all too natural!
Nice

Pliniad: Roman Genius Will Unite This Godforsaken Realm

Chapter:19

Oct 11, 2025

To:Mike Psellos

It wasn't

Pliniad: Roman Genius Will Unite This Godforsaken Realm

Chapter:19

Oct 11, 2025

To:Mike Psellos

Oh, thank you! 😊
I described the beast as I imagined it.
(Though, I think I over-described the action sequence with the "rhino" and the shade warrior. It's already on top of the list of things I want to edit)

As for Elias's architect instinct, I'm really glad you observed! 😊
And, I don't know... the whole tower scene just looked cool in my head.
I hope it did/does to others as well!

The Common Ground

Chapter:13

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

Yeah, it was a wild scene and I particularly liked writing it ✍🏻

The Common Ground

Chapter:10

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

They did, but... not for too long 🤓

The Common Ground

Chapter:9

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

Yeah
No one would immediately know everything the moment they "joined" such an imaginary world.
The more you dwell the more you understand.
So, we see that there are (dream)stuff even Fawks doesn't know yet 🫢

The Common Ground

Chapter:8

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

Oh, so glad you think so! 😊
I sure was worried about the impact this would have to the potential reader 📖

The Common Ground

Chapter:7

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

It's not exactly that it's not allowed or forbidden by law... it's just how dangerous it really is! To yourself and those around.
I guess I didn't convey it clearly (at this point of the story, at least)
It's... more like "don't play with fire" a fireman would say, not the reaction of a policeman to lawless activities.
I'm glad you liked it 😊

The Common Ground

Chapter:6

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

Oh, yeah... that raining part was tough to write ✍🏻
I wasn't sure how to put together what I imagined, which, I think should be rather visually stunning in a possible motion picture sequence.
Also, the shoe (and generally clothing) designer part was a fun one to write too 🙂

The Common Ground

Chapter:5

Oct 11, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

I'm glad you liked so many things from a single chapter! 😊
Of course, it was a rich one: I mean full of content.

Note on architects: the usually have way more imagination than political engineers. They're the ones to conceive and create structures like Sydney Opera, or all those amazing building that Gaoudí built (those in particular are pretty amazing!)

The Common Ground

Chapter:4

Oct 10, 2025

Good pacing in this chapter. It did did a solid job of introducing the core characters and setting up their dynamic.
The exchange with Elysia that led to the fight was handled smoothly. And the story feels like moving along nicely 👍

Cyanic Odyssey

Chapter:1

Oct 10, 2025

This chapter had me hooked from the very beginning. It was a perfectly executed closure; a powerful final goodbye for Barbara and her past habitat. Excellent work! 👌

Pliniad: Roman Genius Will Unite This Godforsaken Realm

Chapter:18

Oct 10, 2025

I tried to describe as vividly as I could imagine... something that I wouldn't actually want to go through! ✍️

The Common Ground

Chapter:3

Oct 10, 2025

To:Philip H Shen

Nice job spotting both details! Those were the key things from the two different times Elias drove 👍
Thank you for reading 😊

The Common Ground

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