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Hello! I used to be on Honeyfeed way back then but had to retire due to some personal stuff. Now I'm back and I hope to enjoy all these brand new changes and new additions the page has to add.
You can find me at RoyalRoad as well!
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Aug 07, 2023
Alright, this chapter has more substance to it. It's shaping to be good :)
Hm... interesting premise. Good writing, the pacing is a bit rushed on some edges but we're all in a learning process. Time to read the next chapter!
As long as no Emperor Penguins are used as a special skill in this football game, I'm in. Say no to Emperor Penguin's abuse. All in all, solid chapter.
To:lolitroy
Yes...?
The inner turmoil could be felt with the writing language. I felt like drowning alongside Haru in his world devoid of colour. That was a really nice touch, of transmitting such strong emotions without outright spelling them and just feel them with the prose!
To:kazesenken
That's one of the whiplashes I was aiming for so I'm pretty happy I delivered. And sure, go ahead to think of Ar Tonelico, makes me happy as well, great games with banger OSTs. I'll reveal why I chose that name too, so it's not only for fanservice sake.
Thank you for reading!!
To:Shulox
But is it a coup if the one "coup"'ed wants to coup even when his own city doesn't know he was coup'ed? Thinking emoji.
Yes, since fairies are the embodiment of nature they can just, get all excited and go all out and just go kaboom, and be reborn without even noticing. The lore of touhou fairies inspired me for that ; v;
Thank you so much for the comment!
I'd recommend separating the dialogues instead of lumping them together, but all in all, it was a pretty solid chapter. A group of misfit friends and the finale of the chapter was expected. I'm looking forward to when this "vigilante"'s identity is revealed because, we all know by now, right ;)
To:Pernodi
Yeah, it was hard to find another way of referring to the mage of Tonelico when writing in third person. I apologise for the confusion it brought upon this chapter.
CHANCE ENCOUNTER TIME!!!!
Why is everyone hyperfocusing on the rats, help.
To:Arman Azeem
Please breathe.
To:Dissartist
Oh please, don't worry about not having much to say, I truly appreciate you taking your time to read it and even leave a comment. Thank you so, so much.
To:Kaabii
Hehe. I tried my best.
Thank you for reading!
Hopefully I meet your expectations on Chapter 1 ;;;
Thanks for reading!