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Hello! I used to be on Honeyfeed way back then but had to retire due to some personal stuff. Now I'm back and I hope to enjoy all these brand new changes and new additions the page has to add.
You can find me at RoyalRoad as well!
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Aug 24, 2023
To:kazesenken
I'll take the feedback into consideration for the following chapters.
Thanks for reading, Kaze!
To:ReadKey
Oh. You'll be surprised next chapter 😉
Oh, the cover is digital! My friend is still working on it, but we agreed I could use the lineart for now!
And thank you!
Aug 23, 2023
Ah, Bubs I finally made it ; v;
I really really really enjoyed this first chapter, it's so you! The style, the narrative, everything is quite good and I'm excited to happily keep on reading!
Democracy will always be the best option, especially when it comes to customer service. Here's you 5 star rating, Junior ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐
"And since you know you cannot see yourself, so well as by reflection, I, your glass, will modestly discover to yourself, that of yourself which you yet know not of."
I thought of that Shakespearean quote after reading the last interaction. They're looking into a mirror, a mirror called a smile.
Aw, this was really sweet Tomocchi.
Your descriptive prose is fantastic. Everything could be felt and transmitted. Just with the prologue, you have captured the attention of so many readers, and that's what a prologue is all about. To make you interested and invested, to yearn for more. I definitely am now.
So far so good. The banter was nice and the fact you took the time to write the lyrics of the songs is commendable. Even if it feels little bit off when it comes to the pacing, I'm happy to keep on reading.
This was absolutely stunning to read. The vibe and the atmosphere are sublime and paint a picture in your mind of the undertones and MCs' struggles. The dialogue feels organic, and round, not flat. I'm happy I was recommended to read this story!
Nao is very sus.
Joke aside, this was a wonderful chapter, and the previous foreshadowing helps to notice how the story might turn out unless you decide to kick the ball in another direction as a red-herring for us readers.
Keep it up!
Hmm... I feel sad for Grace being reduced to a route even if it was supposed to be something funny ; v; It seems she has her struggles, and sure, Haru now wants to use whatever he can find in his daily life to make his dreams more fun after what she mentioned.
Still, it seems he deep down wants to make her happy in some way or another, so hopefully his view about Grace will change!
This time there was more dialogue, that's great! The story flows like a river with the force of a raging ocean, quite a dichotomy given our God here!
Arakawa Under the Bridge huh. So far it's nice, I'd love to see more dialogues though. Hopefully next chapter!
This screams Haruhi Suzumiya, especially given the name, the story title, the synopsis, the way it's redacted and the whole movie intro. What I found fascinating though, was how it was written as a diary for the future MC.