Sep 07, 2021
Aight, this is my stopping point for the day and I figure it's a good one whilst at it. Let's see what the Bubbles has thought so far.
I believe that the past few chapters have really taken a turn, for the better of the story, for the worse for the characters. I feel like after this door that I've dropped in front of me lie all the answers to the questions I've been posing so far. If so, I will be pleased, if not, I will go on assuming. Either way, I'll be satisfied.
Whilst my comments so far have been on the more critical side that was because I feel like this story has a lot of potential. However, as the past chapters proved, it lacks a sense of clarity and knowledge to it. I'm not sure if this was all winged. The religious undertones, the cultural references, the philosophical side of things that I'm sure made Atish squeal with joy, those were all splendid and I'm glad they were there. However, I feel like they were so central to the plot that the plot itself kind of fizzled out around them.
For the most part I had struggled to grasp a semblance of coherent motivation behind the events and the character's actions and for the most part I was left with more questions than I have answered myself. It is all unfortunately unclear. And I understand it being a mystery and all, but when I can't grasp even the most fundamental of concepts of it: the setting, the action, the time, the progression, the space, I'm left to wonder whether I'm incapable or whether there was something amiss through all of this.
Without a doubt the meditative sense this piece evokes is solemn. It tackles many issues and it goes in depth on many problems that go beyond the spectrum of this contained novel, overflowing into the real world. But this very sense leaves everything else feel like nothing but a catalyst and a shell for the notions transmitted, when it should be the other way around. Alas, I hope that the religious showdown and undertones I'll peruse tomorrow with a clear, rested mind will become a swan song to end on a high note.
Until then, however, I wish to say that you shouldn't be down on yourself. Whilst it falls short of my inordinately haughty expectations, it is not a bad novel by any means. If I were to describe it in one word I'd say it's unfocused. I fear the time crunch, constraint and theme you were shoved into had constricted you too much. As such, what was left was but a withered husk of what could've been a tour de force in monographing a host of issues that I'm sure surround you. Hold your head up high, however. You had tried your best and the message had come across. And whilst it wasn't in the best of forms, it was palatable enough for me to reach this far without wincing once. Rejoice. :3
Until tomorrow, I shall bid you a good day and wish myself a good night.
Kind regards,
Bubbles. :3
