Aug 04, 2021
Hiho.
The time is nigh, after a dry spell, to reach deep into the writings on the wall and leave my opinions once again. And you, dear truck-kun writer, shall be my first.
For the most part, I might simply second what Oscar said. The premise is generally not for me, my anime culture being deplorable to understate it, but I can see merit where merit is due in the sense that it attempts to metafictionally treat the subject of a genre. It's not original, unfortunately, but it does a good job at differentiating itself from what I'd wager would be the norm for this niche.
The writing style doesn't do it for me. It is rather monotonous; with something of this parodying/satire caliber I would've expected something more comical or cynical, but you unfortunately tread the line straight down the middle and tackle this issue in a very methodical way. In essence, I don't see any artistic flair in this chapter, in particular, it doesn't brim with uniqueness. The descriptions are tepid at best, the interactions between characters none to speak of and the narration progressing with nothing but a block of exposition. If anything, make it snappier -- again, as Oscar said. Add a bit of movement, a bit of tagging here and there, make the exposition, bland as it's intended, shine through its blandness. Symbolism described the same bleak world in such vividness that it stopped being bleak.
Another issue would be with the containment problem of this chapter. Bite-sized or not, there is the annoying absence of anything climactic that this composition would build upon. Structurally, it fails to engage my storytelling-geared brain because it doesn't deliver on any rising action. Things keep a very constant profile, and whilst not necessarily unentertaining, it can surely become droning.
That being said, I'm quite pleased by the T-R-U-C-K ranking system and the otherwise very planar approach to what you'd think would be a generally covert operation. That being said, we still didn't get to understand why isekai-ing isn't murder. For shame...
I think that's about it.
Bubbles, out.
