Nov 10, 2024
I checked this out because people were talking about it on Discord, and I thought it was going to lean completely into the absurdity of its premise, but there are actually some good sci-fi ideas in here.
I particularly like the philosophy of soldiers losing so as to not inflate their egos, but escaping to survive. At first, you think such a strategy would cause them to be quickly wiped out. On Earth, they wouldn't be able to hold territory and would have nowhere to go. But in space, there's always somewhere to escape to. As long as they're good at the not dying part, they could outlive their aggressors, who might lose troops fighting against other foes.
If you're looking for an area to improve in, I think the easiest might be to review the rules for comma use. You have a lot of unnecessary commas, and in some places, they can cause confusion. For example:
"No human could live here yet, within this wasteland, something remained"
This reads as "No human could live here yet," As in, they can't live there yet, but could in the future. What you really want is to move the comma before "yet":
"No human could live here, yet within this wasteland, something remained"
