Jun 16, 2024
This is well-written and has a strong character voice. Probably the best title in the workshop as well. A agree with Bubbles that there isn't much "story" here, but I didn't have an issue with the style.
The themes presented about the passage of time, the advancement of technology, and the differing personalities of people in peaceful times were more interesting to me than rote descriptions of Japanese landscapes. However, I may be wrong—I've been wrong before, and I'll be wrong again—but I suspect the judges are looking for a feel-good story that doesn't deal with dark issues like those.
Nonetheless, best of luck with judging!
