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Jul 09, 2022

To:WALKER

This whole thing is increably visual novel inspitred, specificly inspired from several sci;ADV visual novels.
As for the second part, well 🙂

Infallibility

Chapter:13

Jul 08, 2022

Currently watching stranger things season 4 while reasing this, and i can safely say this is much better

Are You Real?

Chapter:1

Jul 07, 2022

God dang this was a good chapter. Keep it up!

Cupid's BLAME!

Chapter:2

Jul 07, 2022

To:Alex Theriot

First of all, thanks a ton for checking this out!
Looking back on it, this chapter needs a TON of TLC and editing IMO, and I feel you hit a lot of the issues the chapter has on the mark.
I will die of laugher if they become any more similar lmao

Infallibility

Chapter:2

Jul 05, 2022

To:Deleted User

frick lmao. Thanks for pointing that out.

Infallibility

Chapter:12

Jul 04, 2022

God damn, this is different than RBC, in a good way. The prose especially caught me off guard. There's just so much personality in every word that it really caught my eye. You really caught my attention with this one.
Also that O in the cover art physically hurts me bro .😂

Stars of Aoba

Chapter:1

Jul 03, 2022

To:Makech

The definition of a mood lmao.

Infallibility

Chapter:2

Jul 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

Also thanks for reading!

Infallibility

Chapter:11

Jul 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

No Makoto is 100% just an idiot lol

Infallibility

Chapter:11

Jul 02, 2022

ISEKAIIIIIIIIII

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:8

Jul 02, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Strait up what I would do ngl

Infallibility

Chapter:11

Jul 01, 2022

First of all, The Truth? Great name, brilliant if I do say so myself.
On a serious note, there was a lot in this I liked. Your hook is excellent and the premise is fascinating. The writing as well primarily lives up to what was promised and so far.
Bubbles pointed out most of my issues way better than I could, but one thing I wanted to point out was how you introduce a LOT in this chapter. I feel for some readers it could almost be too much arguably. As Bubs said, I feel some expansion would be rather beneficial.
Despite that, it doesn't change the fact that I feel a lot of this hits for me and flows pretty well.
Also, what are the odds we both named our huge thing The Truth lmao.

Aesthetica

Chapter:1

Jul 01, 2022

To:August

Thanks for reading!

Infallibility

Chapter:10

Jun 26, 2022

To:WALKER

You can't delude yourself from the truth forever

Red-Black Course

Chapter:5

Jun 26, 2022

Litterally me

I Am on Crack

Chapter:1

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