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Aug 01, 2022

To:Deleted User

Lmao you're not the only one whose done that

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Chapter:18

Jul 31, 2022

To:IceDonut

You are gonna love todays chapter 😂

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Chapter:17

Jul 31, 2022

To:IceDonut

We shall see

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Chapter:16

Jul 31, 2022

To:IceDonut

Tbf, Makoto is kind of stupid. Also idk if id call him convinces yet 🙂

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Chapter:10

Jul 31, 2022

To:IceDonut

😶😶😶😶😶

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Chapter:9

Jul 30, 2022

To:IceDonut

Yeah you pretty much got the jist of it, even if its a machine insted of a person at the top.
As foe the second part, your 100% on the right track! Slight spoilers, but it doesnt. At all.
You know how in 1984, their constantly changeing hystory books? Its simmular here. But tgrough a mix of only using thw truth for "important" stuff and editing wrong data, theyve created an illusion of sorts.
Also thanks a ton of reading!

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Chapter:4

Jul 30, 2022

To:AWiddleStar

Yeah, looking back on tjis chapter, you have a point. Thanks for pointing everything out.
Also legit, a semiconductor Was the first thing that came to mind lol.

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Chapter:2

Jul 30, 2022

To:King-gray10

Glad you enjoyed!

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Chapter:2

Jul 30, 2022

Ok so, im mixed on this, the actuall plot itself so far is not bad. You do a good job making it clear exactly whats happening.
My issues more come with the giant blocks of prose and style. While im sure some people like the heavy flow of conseiousness style, I cant say its my thing perse. Also god damn, these paragraphs are huuuuge. Maybe break them up a bit imo.
Dispite that, plot are characters are what really matters, and so far youve done a decent job on the inportant matters. So keep it up!

That time I got reincarnated in the middle of a royal wedding..

Chapter:0

Jul 30, 2022

To:Deleted User

Ever read 1984? 🙂

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Chapter:17

Jul 29, 2022

To:WALKER

Soccer moment

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Chapter:8

Jul 29, 2022

Exactly what id expect in a soccer natch, glorified cheating

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Chapter:8

Jul 29, 2022

To:Deleted User

Fides prisions bad fr

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Chapter:17

Jul 29, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Next chapter 😄

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Chapter:17

Jul 26, 2022

Keep it up! Really like what ive read so far!

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Chapter:3

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