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Jul 07, 2022

To:Alex Theriot

First of all, thanks a ton for checking this out!
Looking back on it, this chapter needs a TON of TLC and editing IMO, and I feel you hit a lot of the issues the chapter has on the mark.
I will die of laugher if they become any more similar lmao

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Chapter:2

Jul 05, 2022

To:Deleted User

frick lmao. Thanks for pointing that out.

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Chapter:12

Jul 03, 2022

To:Makech

The definition of a mood lmao.

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Chapter:2

Jul 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

Also thanks for reading!

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Chapter:11

Jul 03, 2022

To:Deleted User

No Makoto is 100% just an idiot lol

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Chapter:11

Jul 02, 2022

ISEKAIIIIIIIIII

My Government-Issued Girlfriend Can't Be This Cute!

Chapter:8

Jul 02, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Strait up what I would do ngl

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Chapter:11

Jul 01, 2022

First of all, The Truth? Great name, brilliant if I do say so myself.
On a serious note, there was a lot in this I liked. Your hook is excellent and the premise is fascinating. The writing as well primarily lives up to what was promised and so far.
Bubbles pointed out most of my issues way better than I could, but one thing I wanted to point out was how you introduce a LOT in this chapter. I feel for some readers it could almost be too much arguably. As Bubs said, I feel some expansion would be rather beneficial.
Despite that, it doesn't change the fact that I feel a lot of this hits for me and flows pretty well.
Also, what are the odds we both named our huge thing The Truth lmao.

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Chapter:1

Jul 01, 2022

To:August

Thanks for reading!

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Chapter:10

Jun 26, 2022

To:WALKER

You can't delude yourself from the truth forever

Red-Black Course

Chapter:5

Jun 26, 2022

Litterally me

I Am on Crack

Chapter:1

Jun 26, 2022

First of all, its soccer

Red-Black Course

Chapter:5

Jun 26, 2022

Gaslighting down. She just needs to gatekeep and girl boss before becoming best girl.

The Great Detective Doesn't Fall in Love

Chapter:1

Jun 26, 2022

We live in a society

I Am the Greatest

Chapter:1

Jun 26, 2022

To:F.C Fondness

Kono best girl

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Chapter:9

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