Jan 16, 2022
The title is pretty funny. Their dialogue is fun to read, as always. I like how the chapter ended too.
Some typos:
"After the excitement of the prior two days, Pierre decided a calm —>&<— composed walk was in order[] and so[] on "The Girl's" third day staying at his townhouse[] they set —>about<— just such an expedition."
"After the excitement of the prior two days, Pierre decided a calm and composed walk was in order, and so, on "The Girl's" third day (of) staying at his townhouse, they set off on just such an expedition. (probably... who knows?)
"A flock of ducks made —>they're<— way —>nosiely<— up a nearby stream[] and the white[] —>fluffy-clouds<— of the chilly day passed by peacefully above."
"A flock of ducks made their way noisily up a nearby stream, and the white, fluffy clouds of the chilly day passed by peacefully above."
"Maka[] too[] seemed to —>being<— enjoying herself as they walked along the gravel path[] looking out at the scenery, her —>checks<— taking on a faint —>rosyness<— from the cold air brushing against her face."
"Maka, too, seemed to be enjoying herself as they walked along the gravel path, looking out at the scenery, her cheeks taking on a faint rosiness from the cold air brushing against her face."
"That is —>a<— most dangerous place to be[] —>women<—!"
"That is the(?) most dangerous place to be, woman!"
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Those two will go out on a date, right? Make us proud, Pierre.💘
