Dec 02, 2021
I found the first part really amusing and fun to imagine. You refer to it as the "symbolic part" but I took it literally when I first read it. It also made mention of some real-world events, which is something I found really cool.
There are typos and missing commas here and there...
This line: "He also gave Him the warmest greetings from Lucifer, His bygone most beloved and most powerful son."
Calling Lucifer the Great Maker's "son" is one thing. But referring to him as the "most beloved and most powerful son" raises questions about Jesus' identity. Though this is fictional, that line could be tweaked a bit for the sake of accuracy.
"Every demon stood in awe of all this beauty, which was a far cry from the ugly blackness of the purgatory"
I don't know much about purgatory, but the "traditional" home of demons is Hell.
The second part was really good too. So those two lovers reunited after the "Moment" and went on to explore the stars. The ideal honeymoon...nice. I wonder what other humans are up to.
This sentence: "The Sun did not explode after all, 'they' just -->was<-- very happy for the occasion too."
They? Even the sun's pronouns have evolved.
Should be: "The Sun did not explode after all, 'they' were just very happy for the occasion too."
Finally, my favourite part: "Please bear in mind that we are not a threat, despite our immense power. The universe itself is now in the palm of our non-corporeal hand, but we do not (wish to) interfere with any of you."
Spoken like a true deity. 🙇♂️
Great story!
