Apr 20, 2025
It sort of feels like I got swooped up and dragged along with Mika and now I’m just here seeing her become a member of the crew. Not sure if this was intentional but the pacing is actually quite fast. You seem to be prioritizing description and detail over interaction and that’s how you’re filling the word count in chapters. Now personally, I DO like the setting youve built. It sort of gives me a warm feeling despite the events and story being so gruesome. But I think you should find a way to balance the descriptions and interactions. Describing things is fine, and in this case I’d actually say it’s one of the redeeming qualities, but you’re doing it at the sacrifice of potentially meaningful dialogue and effective transitions.
I wouldn’t call this generic, but superficial. You can add depth in quite a few ways here leblunk. Hope this helps
