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Jan 23, 2022

Dude the weird punctuation choices sometimes make me really sad

The Sequence of Kai

Chapter:3

Jan 23, 2022

FOR FUCKS SAKE TRISH

The Sequence of Kai

Chapter:2

Jan 23, 2022

Alright I finally re-read it and refreshed my memory. I’m really enjoying it.

I think a tiny (ok, not really… it kinda reminded me why I found it hard to get through way back then) gripe I have is that it seems there are a lot of points where periods or em dashes need to be used, but instead of those marks, there are commas. It makes the narration stilted at points and forces me to re-read sentences at times or pause unnaturally. If you fix that flow problem, though, I think it’s brilliant.

The Sequence of Kai

Chapter:1

Jan 19, 2022

I actually unironically liked this

In The Middle Of Winter... Miracles Can Happen

Chapter:1

Jan 18, 2022

I contemplated pretending I’d dropped this story before I got to (that part), but I’m not an asshole.

Original Comment: The Dark Knight Rises from the Hunger Games

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:9

Jan 18, 2022

I almost wanted to not like this chapter after reading Benedict’s description as I felt you had included me in the story without my consent, but after seeing my positive depiction I am pleasantly surprised.

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:8

Jan 18, 2022

I drew a tube of blood out of my arms 15 minutes ago. It was scary. There was this separating agent in the tube that turned my blood into three different colours: yellow, red, and a layer that looked like reddish Bailey’s. I thought about those colours a lot as I read this chapter.

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:7

Jan 18, 2022

I want to smell this ball pit

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:6

Jan 18, 2022

tfw you couldn’t make a vore pun with luka doncic

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Vorelando Magic

Chapter:5

Jan 18, 2022

this is a treatise on the national basketball association and its exploitation of college athletes through the minimum draft age requirement of 19 years old

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:4

Jan 18, 2022

this story is stinky, like my foot

Vorelando Magic

Chapter:3

Jan 11, 2022

this is low-effort like baiting

TOTALLY FINE.

Chapter:7

Jan 10, 2022

nooo not the bracelet

TOTALLY FINE.

Chapter:3

Jan 07, 2022

gifted education project

not mature

very gay

ALTaccounti's Roasting Book! (Reopened)

Chapter:2

Jan 07, 2022

roast me noob i got 2 romance stories for u

ALTaccounti's Roasting Book! (Reopened)

Chapter:27

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