Aug 26, 2022
Well, wasn't that a great of an ending? I'm quite envious since I failed to make such spectacular and satisfying ending like that.
It wasn't my cup of tea at first (and probably still isn't), but I can see the appeal and the large potential (it's really large!).
Though the descriptions were a bit lacking, a bit bland, it made up with the accompanying dialogues (though, I'm bothered that everyone's rude to each other; I love Scott. Scott best girl and boy). But, because of the narrative being less on describing but more on telling, it made reading a little easier especially with the five thousand or so words:(Crazy, by the way; how'd you manage to do that!?).
Sometimes, the narrative tends to overexplain things which vex me because I kept track of it. One noticeable example is [Ash Darkstar/Spitfire]; it was a little annoying being constantly reminded that it's the same Ash.
Unfortunately, I'm the most inappropriate reader here since I don't typically watch shounens and prefer description-heavy writings. But, it succeeded in achieving that epic feel; it was a fun read.
At first, I found them cheesy and redundant, but I outgrew the 'summons' (eg. Ignis, cleanse my foes!) and almost found myself saying it out loud like a weeb shouting 'Za Warudo!'
Time for technicals. There were alot of syntax misuse and consistencies that I'd like to see, comparing to other novels (I've read so far). Not saying it's the worst (I've seen far worse), but it can definitely improve to match the other polished novels.
Sometimes you do this [Blabla bla. Which...] which makes it a run-on. 'Which' should be in the same sentence as its subject.
Misspellings here and there----small stuff you'll have to proofread. Otherwise, forgivable and tolerable.
Overall, a great read, ESPECIALLY when you like or love the shounen genre.
