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This is the former home of some of my novels, you can find them these days over on RoyalRoad!

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Oct 04, 2022

To:EliteWarrior910

It's worth it man, really is - Thought
I'll try and still keep my eye out for a wolf among rats😊👍

Former Home of 'UnderCurrent - Can You Break The Cycle' - Now available of Royal-Road and Scribble-Hub

Chapter:0

Oct 02, 2022

Won't lie, I have no idea what this meant - I'm bad with numbers ( I think it was you that commented once when I'd used metres instead of inches in a chapter😂😂) - I say that as I may be a bad case study, but for me as someone bad at numbers, this chapter did not help me understand the game at all😅.

Honestly not sure if that's a critic or not😅👍

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:176

Oct 02, 2022

Our boi ain't the sharpest, but he got heart😅😊

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:175

Oct 02, 2022

Holy fuck a duck that twist was played brillaintly, feels natural and surprising at once - Great stuff - And damn the second cover is nightmare fuel, love it!😊😄

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:18

Oct 02, 2022

To:kazesenken

Of course, I don't doubth it😄😊 - I I plan to start the second half today in fact😊👍

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:16

Sep 29, 2022

To:AWiddleStar

Yea I agree with all that for sure😎.

And I think you've done a great job of illustrating the male, female dynamic of the world - That's why I rose the point about the princesses strength tho - I completely see why princesses are still seen as 'womanly' in the old fashioned way - But rather I just wonder why fairytails would be written about frial princesses.

It kind of implys that their powers are recent - That a few generations ago a dragon could of feasible captured a princess - Hence the fairytails.

But your explaination definetly works too - I guess it really is royal propoganda in a manner of speaking😉😂😊👍.

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:16

Sep 29, 2022

Another solid chapter - That said I will raise a nitpick of sorts:

Worldbuiling.
Throughout the book there's been a handful of places where I've found myself wondering about this - By all accounts this is a regular fantasy medieval world, perfectly suited as a backdrop to your story - However every now and then I do feel a little drawn out.

I get why the little boy and mom say what they say - I like it in fact! It's a great way to affect Chiffons thinking - But why?
Like in the world or atleast this kingdom why would the fairytails depict a princess as physically frail - I totally understand that a princess carrying her knight would be irregular but why would a strong princess be strange to these people?

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Again that is only a nitpick, but I think it's noticible becuase your style is so vivid!

All your amazing description and poetic pose paint a very clear image and cohesive world, so even the smallest oddity can give cuase to the reader to pause and be taking out of the moment.

I'm left to presume that frail princesses in this world as part of fairytail must be state propaganda!!😉😂😂😂

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Just thought I'd mention it - Other than that, great chapter as usual😄😊👍.

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:16

Sep 28, 2022

Dang, the whispering words, the red-misted blood lust and then the overwhelming sense of terror - Not becuase Chiffon was in true danger but becuase of the claustrophobia.

I don't say this lightly, this chapter gave off a little of that Gunbuster interiptation of space - Of a cramped place, of unseen terror and fear from within.

Another really good chapter for sure

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:15

Sep 27, 2022

I don't know what to say, more shall we say 'refined' than most food based anime😉 - Just a nice playful chapter😄

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:14

Sep 25, 2022

To:AWiddleStar

Mind, I absolutely love it!!😄👍

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:11

Sep 25, 2022

The first half of this one is 'Damn chiffon girl, get yo head out the gutter😉' but the second half... Well you did warn me we'd learn alot and talk about an interesting character informed by their tramatic past!!

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:11

Sep 25, 2022

Well this took a spooky turn...😅

A Tour of the World Between Worlds

Chapter:24

Sep 25, 2022

Dang the torture stuff is still brutal😂😉

The Wolf Among Rats

Chapter:4

Sep 25, 2022

"It's never too early!!!" 😂😂😂

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:173

Sep 23, 2022

Holy jeebus, I'm loving how much we get to learn about Chiffon even down to how she personifys monsters - Great chapter!

The Wanderblood Princess and Sir Try Hard

Chapter:8

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