GoneSoSoon

GoneSoSoon

I'm scared of staircases.

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    Feb 05, 2024

    To:Mo

    For a creature who fights their own duality, consistency is important. The garden both serves not just a metaphorical point, but a plot point (Later explained). The reason that it represents spring is that it is the closing of winter, of bad days, and so it is a peaceful place that these knights of the Paragon can always return to in order to stabilise themselves. The Paragon Knights and Aelem are alike in a certain way. While all she can remember about her past is her name, the only things that Howl and Lace can remember about their pasts are few, to the extent that they gave each other names when being adopted into the Paragons. In a way, the three knights- Omen, Lace, and Howl are like a family. Of course, Omen is the only one with a biological father, being the Paragon, Harbinger. However, unlike Aelem who has had no one at all to foster that idea of 'normalcy' despite it all, the Knights have a basis for living a normal life, and so they can enjoy things. This is duality to Aelem, who has no basis for normalcy, and has decided that before she has that- the life of a 'normal woman' she cannot enjoy things to their fullest extent. This will eventually lead her to chase normalcy at every turn.

    The symbolism of 'The Butterfly Knight' is exactly what you've already discovered- hollowness to avoid pain. However, the butterfly itself has not truly emerged from the cocoon. From time to time, a genuine smile may be the peeking of a leg out of the silk, but the wings have not yet been spread. There are a lot of strangling 'constraints' in Omen's environment- particularly his father. He can only be an emotionless, serious knight in this environment. There is no room for his wings to spread.

    Thank you for the critique! Usually I struggle with the flow of words, as well as repetition. This is usually solved by a lot of revising/editing, however, once again, this novel was sadly very rushed. Ergo, these problems present themselves a lot. I hope you can bear with it ;_;/

    Ty for reading as always, dearest reader. I appreciate you everyday. ^.^

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    The Butterfly Knight and the Leviathan.
    Faded Scales of a Hyacinth
    Chapter:5

    Feb 02, 2024

    To:Mo

    The notion of 'choice', and of 'morality' is something i tried to work with here. It is all up to interpretation of the reader. Is one life worth more than many? This situation is effectively a grander use of the classic trolley problem. It really doesn't matter what choice is picked. Someone dies in some inhumane fashion by another's hands. Finding the name of the dragon is the best outcome, as no one dies. However, can you bet so many lives on such a slim chance? That's why for so long, these children raised as knights have killed so many. Wouldn't someone like that, who has dulled the effects of death on their mind, all seem hollow in some way? The bitterness of Howl, the enigmatic aura of Lace, and the kindness of Omen- in their solitude, they're all quiet, blank, hollow, and lost in thought. Once again, it's all just a mask- as to 'act' is to 'be'. Living in this way is their way to cope. As for the idea of a 'spectator', I wonder if that's the case. While the role of a spectator is to observe, it is also to subtly influence. However, I don't know if anyone applies to that 'subtlety' as of yet. For Leviathan, he may be more of a hunter- a provoker specifically. Someone who outwardly influences. One thing is clear, and it is that the idea of a 'woman' that Aelem wants to act as has very specific requirements. To be is to have these things, and to be without them means that she is not quite yet a real, normal woman. As long as she is a wanderer, as long as she is alone, she may as well not be considered by herself as a human. Once again, thank you for your wonderful comments. I always enjoy reading them. I hope you will continue to enjoy this very rushed work ^^

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    The Butterfly Knight and the Leviathan.
    Faded Scales of a Hyacinth
    Chapter:3




    Jan 27, 2024

    To:Mo

    I typed out a long comment, but somehow the site deleted it upon posting. Thank you honeyfeet. Anyways, to resummarise, I think you're right on the mark when it comes to the symbolism. Sadly, since this was rushed, I'm grieving a bit over how shallow or shaky the character motives were. Moreover, there may be a slight chance that a lot of historical context is left out in the future of the novel, so I'm not sure if it gets unraveled and would like to add some context here. Prior to the events of the novel, a 'leviathan' lost the fight against the remnant will of the 'monster' and became a calamity, killing thousands, and therefore creating historical precedence for widespread fear and discrimination against 'leviathans'. Besides this, the reason this is a thing is not because they are some naturally occurring amalgamation of messed-up creatures, but rather a human burdened with a horrible fate by cultists who worship the dragons who have supposedly long-since died out. Those remnant wills of those dragons are embedded in runes carved into the hearts of newborn children, and those children are basically raised as vessels for the rebirth of the dragons. Despite that, the main character has managed to find herself far apart from that cult, and has lived her life as a vagrant, trying desperately to cope with the monster she knows nothing about, yet fears despite that. She has never known a life without pain, anxiety, fear, or a normal sense of 'womanhood' that she sees in the smiles of women in the cities she visits. Anyways, that's about it. Love the painting comparison. I love the works of Munch. I hope you continue to enjoy, as always. Thank you for your insights, dear reader <3

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    The Butterfly Knight and the Leviathan.
    Faded Scales of a Hyacinth
    Chapter:1

    Jan 23, 2024

    To:Mo

    hi hello once more! It is nice to see you in this brand new year! *^.^*
    Ok with greetings out of the way, it also looks like I now have to finish this novel since you're reading it. I'll get right on that lol.

    Life is a very interesting topic in this one, as the concept of 'life' to her is very standardised as you'll see soon. To her, a life of romance, of fleeting pleasure, of the comforts of a home and consistent warm food are what 'living' sounds like. To her who is vilified and experiences none of that makes her feel as if she isn't living, rather like she is some conceptualised form of 'death', or as if that 'human life' she isn't experiencing means she isn't really human. This entire novel is about wanting to find and experience that life- to be a human, and to be a 'normal woman'.
    The physical (and also metaphorical struggle) aspect of this novel is the duality between the desire (the monster Leviathan) and the desire, human. Aelem wants to live a normal life, and Leviathan wants to take over her body and bring calamity to the world. That struggle between the two are polarising, as you mentioned, and that conflict is the whole tension of the novel itself. To her, who wants to be a woman, the monster is her only shackle.
    There's also an interesting subversion here. 'Beauty' as many would describe is a sunset, a flower, or a starry sky. Yhhm was focused around natural beauty of the world and the lack of it in Aethine. This novel is more about how beauty means nothing when you're surrounded by it. It is all about the grass being wilted on your side of the fence, wanting to experience that other 'beauty' that you see on the other side. In her case, the natural beauty of the world means nothing when she's forced to live a vagrant life, constantly surrounded by it.
    There's also an interesting comparison to the two- the monster and the human, being the wolf and the lamb. The wolf represents death, and predation, while the lamb is life, and prey. However, the aspects of the two roles were something I reversed a bit. The docile lamb, the human, is actually a bit brazen. The aggressive wolf, the calamitous monster, is a bit laid-back despite his goals.
    As for the meaning of the flower, the hyacinth, both beauty and jealousy are the two main takeaways, so I hope you'll keep those in mind.
    I hope you'll continue to enjoy this work, even though I feel like I rushed it a bit,,,
    And don't feel the need to keep it short for my sake. I enjoy reading your lengthy thoughts.
    Until next time, dearest reader. *^.^*

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    The Butterfly Knight and the Leviathan.
    Faded Scales of a Hyacinth
    Chapter:0