Christian Widjaya

Christian Widjaya

A passionate game enthusiast who like to design game concepts, and story-writing at the same time. Loves writing engaging stories or serious, slow and interconnecting stories. For hire.

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    Jun 12, 2023

    If anyone is interested, this is the one that had been cut from the draft due to chapter length. However, if you feel you want to check any details that trimmed out, then check these out:

    Director cut:
    “Before we start, we should think about ourselves.” Sean Hammock started the conversation.
    “I’m a center. I’m good at screening and I have confidence about anything in the paint. From post moves, layups, dunks, rebounding, box-outs, or even blocks. Just name it and I’ll make it happen.”
    “Yo’! Name’s Carlos. I’m PG.” Carlos chimed in.
    “Playmaking, ball handling, and shooting are my things. I can create some opportunities by making juicy passes to y’all or breaking free from a defender for a clean shot, or even close-quarter layups. Give me a sign and I’ll make a play for ya.”
    Following Carlos, it’s Alex next.
    “I’m Alex. I’m a Shooting Guard and shooting is my specialty. I’m making quick and accurate shots, even deep threes. Looking forward to receiving a ball from you all.”
    I introduced myself as I didn’t want to be left behind.
    “My name is Keith. I’m originally a Power Forward but I’ll play as a Small Forward here. I excel at drives and dunks. I’ll be in your care.”
    “Wait!”
    Sean suddenly interjected.
    “Is that all you can do, Keith? Just drives and dunks?” He asked with a puzzled look.
    “Well, I can do some screens, free throws, and layups, I guess? Maybe some passing, box-out, and rebounds as well.” I replied, unsure what was wrong with my answer.
    “Ha-ah!” He facepalmed, shaking his head. “Ah okay, whatever, that would suffice for now.”
    Wait, what’s wrong with drives and dunks? You get close to the ring, you dunk the ball in, that’s what a Forward should do, right? Shooting is primarily the Guards’ job and rebound is primarily the Center’s job. It’s not a Forward job.
    As I was thinking, Sean faced Jamal and asked him.
    “What about you, Jamal?”
    “I’m a Power Forward. I excel at post moves, hooks, rebounding, box-outs, drawing contacts, free throws, layups, dunks, and making screens.”
    As Jamal finished telling his expertise, Sean clapped his hands.
    “Okay. As I heard about you guys, Carlos will be the cornerstone of our plays. For our defense, it’s the classic man-to-man defense, you know it.”
    Sean looked in my direction as he speaks.
    “For our offense, Keith, you will be on the lookout for any fastbreak potential, and any open lane to dunk in.”
    He turned his face to Alex next.
    “Alex, I need you to find open spots and pull the trigger quickly. Remember to rotate and keep moving.”
    “Jamal” He looked to the afro guy. “You and I will go and fight near the ring. Try to find any kind of opening there.”
    And last, it’s Carlos’s turn as Sean faces him.
    “Carlos, you will lead the offense and make the calls. I’ll entrust this role to you.”
    “I won’t let ya down, senior.”
    Carlos ended his reply with a smile, which assures Sean a little.
    “Okay, that’s all for our discussion, let’s get ready.”

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    The (Temporary) Cover Image
    Would You Paint My Dunk
    Chapter:7







    Jun 11, 2023

    Ok feedback for real, this chapter made me laugh a bit, the comedy is there and I could feel it. But, I don't know if this is intentional, or the flow isn't natural at all. I could sympathize with MC as he is obsessed with a certain VTuber, but I couldn't get why MC did a quick math problem in a backboard, and either was right but still be laughed by the entire class, or was wrong, but a girl suddenly stepped up for him. I do get it if the girl is actually crushing on MC, or even his GF, but there's no way a girl would step up for a boy normally if it's not the either two of them.

    Also, the two-faced teacher with favoriting is also quite clear, but you could have told that the teacher suddenly turn 180 degrees or flip a switch instead of two-faced, teachers tends to treat naughty students worse and exemplary students well after all.

    Also, a ticket to the the principal > you can explain if MC should face principal because he was busted playing games in classroom or breaking classroom rules, and then proven not to listen. Idk what region is this, if you are imitating Japan or anything, but I couldn't relate to my old school. You don't face principal that easily. Most of the time, you will face morale teacher instead, or dicipline committe. And heck, you CANNOT reject it. MC's dialogue to deny or reject the call is... Both funny, and at the same time, unrelatable.

    Other than unrelatable and skewed off logic, it was fine chapter to boot.

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    vt next door 2
    The Vtuber Next Door
    Chapter:1