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Jan 26, 2022

To:Deleted User

Ceci is precious.

Guardians of Dawn: Volume 1

Chapter:6

Jan 25, 2022

To:otkrlj

It may not be building up to what you think it is.

Guardians of Dawn: Volume 1

Chapter:5

Jan 23, 2022

To:Makech

I don't want you to cry...

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:3

Jan 23, 2022

To:Makech

Nothing will stop the yaoi canon will it?

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:3

Jan 20, 2022

To:Deleted User

They're different people!!!

Guardians of Dawn: Volume 1

Chapter:0

Jan 19, 2022

To:Deleted User

Technically, she's Reed 1.0. I made Sarah a good decade before I even conceived of Reed lol.

Guardians of Dawn: Volume 1

Chapter:0

Jan 19, 2022

To:otkrlj

It's shiny Reed, she has black hair instead of blonde.

Guardians of Dawn: Volume 1

Chapter:0

Jan 11, 2022

To:Deleted User

how many convos have you had with 12 year olds? They speak in italics lol.

Silent Night

Chapter:6

Jan 11, 2022

To:Deleted User

Thanks! I tried my hardest to make a good ending!

Silent Night

Chapter:6

Dec 21, 2021

To:N. D. Skordilis

Thank you for the feedback. I don't care that this is a webnovel platform, though, I disagree that webnovels can't be wordy.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:0

Dec 21, 2021

To:N. D. Skordilis

They aren't all this long. The prologue is my second longest chapter. But they are very long, I will admit that much, 3000 words or so is the average.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:0

Dec 20, 2021

To:Ah Rin

It makes the MC read as a lot more pretentious than he's characterized as being.

Unravelling Winter.

Chapter:1

Dec 20, 2021

To:Ah Rin

I think the problem is there's nothing really playing up the "awkwardness" part. It doesn't feel awkward, it feels like the surface-level "keeping everything the same" situation is all there is on the surface, I don't feel any tension in the moment. So even though things HAVE changed, I don't FEEL that change in the dialogue or the thoughts of the characters, which means all I'm looking at is a conversation where things haven't really changed, followed by a sudden "well now I'm uncomfortable" from the narrator that the dialogue didn't really convey properly.

Unravelling Winter.

Chapter:2

Dec 20, 2021

To:Ah Rin

Lines like "the two worst memories of my life resided in winter". I don't know a lot of people who think that way.

Unravelling Winter.

Chapter:1

Dec 20, 2021

This guy seems a little too hung up on his mom's love life. Makes me wonder if this is gonna go the incest route. As for Saeko, well... it still doesn't feel like I would expect given her situation. I also don't really get a good feel for this supposed "wall" that's sprouted up between them, but mainly that's because I haven't gotten a good sense that anything's awkward or uncomfortable between the two of them yet. The tension hasn't been conveyed properly.

Unravelling Winter.

Chapter:3

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