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Oct 12, 2021

To:otkrlj

Yikes. (Same, tho...)

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:13

Oct 12, 2021

To:Deleted User

Yeah, it's really long lol. Sorry.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:0

Oct 10, 2021

Only discussion about you I had with Pearl is her saying you were a sweetheart and me saying that was debatable. I don't hate you.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:49

Oct 10, 2021

I don't hate you, Tomoyuki. I don't. Sorry you feel that way.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:49

Oct 09, 2021

To:N. D. Skordilis

Two things:
1. The reason Ueda-san let Daisuke come back home to see his family is two-fold. If he runs off screaming into the night with a baseball bat and never returns, that's probably going to raise a lot more questions (and a more serious investigation) than if he comes back and just leaves. Also, she wanted him to have the chance to see his family one last time before he was eaten. Also, consider: she had just been in the process of eating, and then someone she knows came in screaming. She doesn't know who he's told or what's going on, but the answer probably isn't to just eat him the minute he sees her. For all she knows, he may have said to his parents "my classmate Ueda-san is being attacked! I'm going to go get her!" In which case, eating him now would draw even MORE attention to her. She needed to figure out what was going on, make sure his disappearance couldn't be linked to her directly, and THEN she could take her time eating him.
What sounds more suspicious? Her, an innocent girl, coming to his house and meeting his family, leaves a few hours later and says her goodbyes and then they find out that he's run away from home, or for him to disappear into the night waving a baseball bat around? What are the police going to suspect, that she ate him? Kidnapped him? It's not like there's any evidence anywhere, or anything that could tie her to what happened. It's not a big deal to her either way, and this way he gets to say goodbye to his family.
2. Yes, famineans are capable of devouring someone without leaving a trace. It's how they've survived this long. So yes, "super hoover mode" is in play (though Ueda-san was certainly sloppy).

Love Bites

Chapter:2

Oct 09, 2021

To:N. D. Skordilis

The excessive descriptive prose is there to highlight the shock of the horror, I'm glad it worked for you!

Love Bites

Chapter:1

Oct 08, 2021

To:N. D. Skordilis

Believe me, 100% intentional. I wanted to go for as exaggerated as possible to capture the exact kind of cringe you're thinking. You'll see why I did it in future chapters.

Love Bites

Chapter:0

Oct 05, 2021

To:Debrishi Kar

Thank you! Several people have made that comparison already, at some point I've really gotta check that one out! 😅

Love Bites

Chapter:2

Oct 05, 2021

To:otkrlj

What "hmm"?

Love Bites

Chapter:4

Oct 03, 2021

To:Deleted User

Thank you, we'll see how it goes.

Light in the Moon's Shadow

Chapter:0

Oct 03, 2021

To:Real Aire

It's very much a mini-series, a short background story. Probably only going to be a few chapters.

Light in the Moon's Shadow

Chapter:0

Sep 27, 2021

I think the only reason you don't think my descriptions are a problem is because it was something that was brought to my attention before you read my story and I began severely reigning them in and editing them down. Before that, it was really, really long. Like, absurdly long.

And part of that was definitely the focus on internalized thoughts of characters and how they react to their environment. I'm not sure if descriptions will offset character's internal focus (especially since so much of my cast is introverted) but it's definitely something I need to experiment with to get the balance right.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:1

Sep 27, 2021

To:JK

Yeah, I ended up cutting a lot of the visuals because people said that I was being too descriptive.
And Elly not having any ambition about school is kind of the point. She doesn't want to go, she expects it to be awful, but she doesn't have a choice.

As for the bullying, that will be extensively gone into at later points in the story, and it felt weird for Elly to be commenting on the reason she was being chased here, considering that it's such a rote thing for her. But they will come at a later point in the story.

As for prose, feel free to share thoughts, anything helps for rewriting later.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:1

Sep 27, 2021

It's okay. I don't want you to feel bad, please, IT WAS NOT YOU. My depression bout was a culmination of a bunch of things (that I will not go into) that I have been dealing with.

It. Is. Not. Your. Fault.

I don't want you to feel guilty for my crummy mental state when all you did was give me exactly what I was asking for.

Please, don't feel bad. Yes, your comments hurt. But my depression isn't your fault, you didn't exacerbate anything (and the unbreathe and cult comments was an inside joke for a Fauna Fight discord I happened to be invited to last night when a bunch of us were talking, sorry, the discord has some of those)

I'm sorry I frightened you into thinking that way. But I promise that you have nothing to feel guilty about. Honest. You had no idea about my emotional vulnerability, you were not trying to hurt me, you didn't even know. You were trying to help. You have NOTHING to feel guilty about, and I'm sorry that someone misunderstood the situation and accused you.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:49

Sep 26, 2021

What I want is to both be a better writer and write what I want to write. I don't want false validation or praise. I want to improve, but if I have to choose between being a good writer and fundamentally altering the story that I want to write, I'll choose to be a bad writer who writes what he likes every time.

The Heir of the Dragon

Chapter:48

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