Mar 12, 2025
Been waiting all week for this 😭😭🔥🔥🔥🔥
First off bro amazing job on the dialogue it’s so much better and flows so much smoother now. I can see improvement.
I think you do really well at incorporating the main theme into the story. The whole idea that the world is ending and all. It really does make for good moments between characters like this, and honestly, I think you display it pretty well.
The highlight of the chapter for me was definitely the moment where Atlas was alone, though. I could honestly understand him so well after you showed him simply losing the motivation to be the infinite being that saves the world again. Hes still a person, and he’s tired. I feel that man lol
I wonder why Julian and his sister aren’t going home. I’m assuming that part in the story will be a large component of his character development.
All in all though, a pretty chill chapter. I felt like I was relaxing with them haha
