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Orionless

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    Mar 19, 2025

    ALRIGHT so it’s actually been a little bit since I read these chapters..
    AND I CANT BELIEVE YOU PULLED THE SISTER IN THE HOSPITAL TROPE FOR VICTOR HAHAHA
    I gotta say though, you sort of gave me what I wanted with the dynamic between Abigail and Victor. As of the present moment, it seems that Abigail carries out his ideals better than he does himself (since clearly he forsook them). Victor sort of gave Abigail a purpose.
    But enough about her. I have a LOT to say about Victor.
    First off, he was the most idealistic precocious pedantic child ever 😭 BUT that is relevant. Even after seeing his ideals devolve from the tragedy that occurred, I still feel like he doesn’t fully accept that his role is simply self-preservation now. With this chapter, I can confirm that he once was inherently selfless and righteous (and I think it’s pretty cool how Abigail becomes a reflection of that later on). That is the foundation of his character, and I don’t think it could be wiped away so easily even with an event of that magnitude. Sure, he might think that it’s all pointless right now, but I can definitely see there coming a time where, perhaps, he attains the power he wants and has a change of heart.
    My favorite part here was definitely the transformation of his perspective on the world, from one of hope to one of despair. Death—something so common, was unable to be comprehended by him until he saw only a glimpse of through what happened to Alice. I can say that his ideals were quite tenuous to be broken by something that seems so ubiquitous, and that means he actually is quite naive, but maybe that’s just what’s needed.
    I’ll stop here and say this, though:
    This is a good foundation for what’s to come. Im not gonna lie and say it’s perfect, but it sets things up nicely. I guess we’re on to the big stuff soon haha

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    Mr. Atlas Cover 4
    Mr. Atlas
    Chapter:20





    Mar 18, 2025

    okay, so i dont know if this is done purposefully, but i noticed something: to me, a reader, Atlas actually doesnt feel very human. It goes past the simple descriptions you give him. It feels like you're deliberately showing that he has nothing to say or think, and that further emphasizes the idea of him being a shell of his old self.
    now enter this chapter.
    julian is here describing Atlas as if he is a lifeless husk, which has been made pretty clear from previous chapters. normally, you'd call someone you pick up off the streets a "stray dog," but that implies that the person is in need of nourishment and care and whatnot.
    Atlas is not.
    Right now, regardless of whether he likes it, he is still a being above the rest. He has no need for sustenance or nurturance. I might be just restating what is already known, but it feels like the statement carries a bit more weight now: Atlas is quite literally a drifting deity on Earth. But there is also a human part of him, and I'd say that part resembles a newborn. His personality and disposition have been wiped clean, and now we have the blank slate before us.
    With that in mind, I read further.
    Mary seems to be "teaching him how to live," and this, to me, is very significant. It's as if she's breathing life into him. As if she's reminding him that he IS still human. As if she's reminding him what humanity is.
    Maybe he will start to realize that he no longer needs to look at the world with the perspective of someone from above. He might begin to embrace his humanity once more, and in turn, that may bring forth some remnants of his life before holding up the sky, when he was (supposedly) just a normal human being.
    an interesting chapter dude i feel like solid development is being made

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    Mr. Atlas
    Chapter:12