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Jul 30, 2021

I'm actually grateful this chapter was written from Enang's perspective and that of everyone, she seems put together (despite all the tragedy she endured).

It's interesting that Enteng's crazyness delays her decision to exterminate him. I hope I understand later on why she was going to kill him originally (was it fear from him turning into one of those things)?

Zero.

Chapter:5

Jul 30, 2021

We finally get a grasp of the madness Enteng is dealing with as he copes with the loss of his family and he accepts his new reality.

Reading this story, I got the impression Enteng was back in his original world (and that the former human monsters was some kind of outbreak instead of an isekai, which to me would be more interesting).

If the girl is in her 20's even though Enteng is much older, she is actually a young woman/young lady (unless she was spoiled by her parents growing up).

I was a little confused about who is talking in the dialogue. I thought the "How did you know" was Enteng speaking to the girl and not the other way around until I reread the passage

Zero.

Chapter:4

Jul 30, 2021

To:Fuzzy Rabid Usagi

No, he's doing cactus powder. It's the power-up support from the angel/boss creature in the 1st chapter.

Gurg, the fight between Enteng and Benok was a bit confusing. He ignored his brain and muscles telling him to stop...Even though this is Enteng, it could have read like it was Benok (and if it was Benok, then its fine because that's how it reads)

The smashing like a pinata doesn't line up (to me at least) with a being headless corpse. If he bashed the head in, the head would still be there. But if the corpse has no head, it may be better to say he smashed the monster's head clean off.

Also, if the club can cut and sever, what's the problem?

Zero.

Chapter:3

Jul 30, 2021

I credit your amazing visualization, being able to see this in my head is proof the writing has me engaged. I'm not really clear on what kind of monster Benok is from the description (frog like with scales man, lizardman, dragonkin, or perhaps some other type with ripped muscles), but I'm sure you'll elaborate later on.

How will the man now equipped with wings of his family who don't want him to die fare against the monster?

Zero.

Chapter:2

Jul 30, 2021

The opening chapter is very detailed and it definitely compels me to want to learn more. However, it may be too gory and graphic detailed for an all ages (PG-13) audience (flesh stained walls, skin hanging ceiling, blood oozing). The war crimes edict from the "help" reminds me of summoned slaughterer which I personally thought went far too overboard (and that was not a YA work, but Mature)

Zero.

Chapter:1

Jul 29, 2021

To:kazesenken

Yep, 6" makes total sense. I was visualizing a 6" tiny jellyfish with meter long tentacles and somehow my brain though that didn't make sense. But it is magic for a reason

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:9

Jul 29, 2021

To:kazesenken

what comes to mind with these unresolved characters are o-makes (like in one-piece) where the author sets aside 1 page, usally 4 koma style showing what happened to those irrelevant side characters. Maybe that epilogue idea you floated (what happened to the side characters) is worth it

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:14

Jul 29, 2021

I'm really proud of Maribell's actions in this chapter. Trust, but verify after all the crazy shit she has been through

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:15

Jul 29, 2021

Maribell will be known as the witch of massage courtesy of Snazzy-chan. Or will Snazzy-chan be known as the sacred beast of massages. This arc was nicely set-up and had a funny conclusion.

But whatever happened to the 3 stooges who were frozen? I hope Cassandra decided to thaw them at least

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:14

Jul 29, 2021

To:kazesenken

Okay that makes sense. I do remember that explanation way back in the beginning of the story. The power itself hasn't made too many descriptive appearances so I forgot the mechanism until now

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:10

Jul 29, 2021

While I am glad they made up, and it was pretty emotional, would a vain bitch like Cassandra really forgive Maribell that easily? It wasn't so much her fear but her jealousy of Clive liking her best friend that really pushed her off the deep end. The grimiore was just the fuse for the explosion.

I was picturing Snazzy doing Aqua Jet in the fight to moisten up Clive, still that come back was good.

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:13

Jul 29, 2021

To:cielink

such laws are overriden when the sacred jellyfish is in cohoots with the witch 😎

Snazzy's final line really made me crack up and it reinvirgorated my spirits. Lets go powered up Maribell. Let's go 2nd wind Snazzy!

Hopefully, Snazzy can be a bridge to turn Maribell's best friend view around and give Maribell the peace of mind she hasn't had in half a year hiding in fear.

I do hope there is a story arc that covers what happened with the actual pick up of the grimiore

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:12

Jul 29, 2021

Beware the trap!

This was a nice set-up that I didn't forsee. Great job in writing it.

Snazzy's heartwarming speech had the opposite effect? I kind of imagined him making a more shocked reaction a tremor of fear. Will Snazzy ever get his (pseudo) harem of witches?

What will become of the 3 stooges (I mean idiots)?

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:11

Jul 29, 2021

Maribell finally found out how to disable Snazzy-chan at will. Fill him with liquor.

It's interesting how possessive Maribell is with Snazzy (although the fear of being abandoned and left on her own is a very valid fear). I do hope either Snazzy picks up on it or she musters the courage to bear her honest insecurities. Though if the plan is drama from mistrust, that is a good setup for it.

It's kind of interesting though that snazzy has telepathy. I take it he can only broadcast his thoughts when he wants to? Because that mechanism lends itself well to reconciliation

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:10

Jul 29, 2021

To:kazesenken

good enough. I'm visualizing snazzy with 6 tentacles (from a previous chapter where you had Snazzy doing different things with specific tentacles, but I don't remember the exact chapter). I'll chalk it up to superhuman strength that he can remove the blouse without it ripping

Why Kill? When Witches Can Be Tentacled!

Chapter:8

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