Jul 13, 2022
To:McMolly
Thank you so much for taking the time to catch up! Prose and dialogue are definitely not my strong points, and I do admit that I overuse tags a lot, but I feel like it stems from my inability to clearly follow dialogue so it's something that I've been wanting to fix for a while.
As for the pacing, there's sadly not a lot of downtime even later on, but it's a choice I made to match the contest deadline (while also having more time on a second entry), so I didn't regret what I did. I can see that it might be going too fast though.
A last bit about the settings: I'm glad that you noticed that some things didn't make sense. I can't spoil things yet but I can say it's a conscious choice that I made about the two protagonists identities later on. Finger crossed that what I had in plan for the ending will finally tie things together.
