Jan 08, 2022
Hmmmm - I'm not sure how to feel about the expedition force.
First let me say i absolutely love them๐, you characterised both squad A and D really fast which is great and they havegenuinelyy quite good fun dynamics.
Further fighting another foreman, both to show the full power of TAOL as-well as to lock onto the Goddess's signature is masterfully done.
But from an organisational standpoint it feels a bit weak.
I know you said before your other book covers Toal more in depth but in this book Anthryom & Gus have alluded to Toal having a sizable attack force and you state a couple chapters back that this is essentially their whole or atleast main army - Which apparently consists of just a couple dozen people?
I'm kinda underwhelmed ya know?
Also small thing but the ranks are weird. It would probably make more sense to have ranks of your own devising, as the way your doing it is a bit off by military standard - Now obviously military standard doesn't matter much but for assholes like me, it can really stand out when there isn't enough worldbuilding done for an 'army'. (I'll refrain from writing an eassy going into further depth on this, you get my point๐๐คฃ).
I'd also love to know a bit more about how all these distinct personalitiesties: Kings, bounty-hunters, hero's, etc - Fit into military life - Like by rights most of them have the experience to lead a squad of their own no?
And some definitely must have the knowledge of generals (Anthyrom certainly does).
I guess it comes off as somewhat contradictory - If the force is small because its still relatively young, then how come their so militarised?
Like they've clearly got discipline and a ranking structure, but thats almsot impossible if they're a relatively new force.
If Toal are new as it were, then their attack force would if anything act more like an adventuring party (That is after all what most of them know right?) but if they've been at this a while and they actively retrain people to suit military life - Then by rights the organisation would naturally be sizably bigger and the ranks would be traditional - That's just how militaries tend to form .
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So while I genuinely love the group and these new dynamics, The military aspect feels either poorly thought out or just a bit shallow (Sorry if none of this comment made sense, I could well just be rambling๐๐
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