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Hi there,
This is the former home of my fiction - Unfortunately from drama, to a lack of innovation - To bugs that made the site unusable to me - My books are no longer being hosted here on here.

This in mind I'm leaving this note here to let people with an interest know you can find all my works in updated versions over on RoyalRoad & ScribbleHub - With plans for other releases yet to come.

For more info you can check out the final chapters of either 'UnderCurrent' or 'The Girl He Used to Know' - Which both depict my odd journey with this website😅.
HoneyFeed had its merits, it got me some feedback & I made some good friends here - But it is in effect the training wheels of web-noveling sites - If you are even slightly serious about your art or simply want a website that will teach you proper formatting & has an actual userbase - Then do yourself a favour, take off the training wheels & seek out the website that is right for you😊.

Best Regards,
-Momentie

registered at: Oct 14, 2021

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Jan 04, 2022

Lol I know I said it jokingly before but man you must be hitting honeyfeeds word limit at this point😅😅.

Speaking as a mobile reader, it feels alot less intimidating when long chapter are split into part 1s and 2s. Migth be worth considering😊👍.

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:41

Jan 04, 2022

Ok so this is by far the best action set-piece thus far.
Further arthyrom speaking equipy swear words is also fun.

This is a far cry from Kobald-Crossing and it's Great to see it get so much better😊😁.

I also love the idea of antrhyom making his own team with his two asasain type friends😂.

With that said I think Netera is portrayed as a bit dim witted here.
I get the taint an all + the broken worldview but she really fells like a burden this chapter - Which is a shame as in all the others (including last chapter's figth), she pulled her own weigth and seemed intelligent enough.

I think it needs a little more balance, her arguing over figthing the serpent seems a bit much and while I understand her feelings at the end of the chapter, I think it migth of been better for her to agree begrudgingly to thrust and run away with anthryom - Only to then next chapter have them meet the employee and for her to demand an explanation.

But that's just me. Again amazing seeing the combat improve so much😊😊👍👍.

The Isekai Police: Promise of a Wonderful Fantasy was a Lie

Chapter:40

Jan 04, 2022

To:Ochroleucous

Always happy to help, I'll look foward to whatever it is your setting😉😉

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:59

Jan 04, 2022

I gotta say the aquarien government kinda sucks lol.
I mean their new APC immediately breaks and is made of unique hard to come by parts (something militaries traditionally make great strides to avoid - Hence the mass usage of the Willys jeep, Sherman Tank and land-Rover in the twentieth century, being used for decades after their creations) plus the bad rations, apparent lack of medical equipment and just general murky orders for the slap-dash group😂.

From a story perspective I'm not entirely sure how to feel about it.
Your story is a sort of urban sci-fantasy(?) - So obviously what were seeing is kinda like monarch sending a group of heros off on a dangerous quest - However the technology and culture levels of Rash are very high which sort of makes it... weird?

It's kind of like the medieval queen sends you on your journey and then a mile down the road your supposed prize horse breaks its leg - Followed by discovering your rations weren't salted and are spoiling and your map is upside down -- That's what it feels like to me atleast😅🤣.

Don't get me wrong, its clear some of it is intentionally to show the incompetence of the ruling powers and what not + I'm a bit of a stickler for military stuff, so really this is just a nitpick but ya it does require a little suspension of disbelief that the group are sent off with such scant orders and resource.

Further, you'll probably explain it before long but its also kind of strange that a town which is clearly regularly trading with & close to other towns and cities - Is apparently in a part of mountains that people avoid owing to dodgy legends?
Maybe that just needs slightly better clarification for if it's just Fiona being superstitious 😂😅🤣.

Again only a small things, still having a lot of fun with these😊😎.

The Nonpareil of Resh (Act 1)

Chapter:59

Jan 04, 2022

Chapter lengths have gotten pretty long again😂😂, thank goodness for the bookmark tool
(then again I write long chapters too, so I guess I'm throwing stones in a glasshouse huh?😂😂)

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:9

Jan 04, 2022

I think this chapter does a good job of making me like runo and netty, they seem chill😊👍.

Though I wonder what powers the androids, I mean their pretty free with the use of their weapons lol😂😂.

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:7

Jan 04, 2022

I'm back!
So many novels to read on HoneyFeed and now I think I've recovered enough from Noah's death to try this one again--

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That heart shaped candy bar is both the cruelest and most ingenuous thing ever - you monster😭😭😂😂

REALM ASSASSIN

Chapter:6

Jan 03, 2022

Holy crap now this is a chapter.

I love the way you describe the city and the battle has a great sense of momentum.

The reaper is super intriguing, another mystery on the massive pile of mysterious eh?😂.

Question - I know the sisters are drawn to fight but if hypothetically they weren't, would they essentially be able to live quietly forever in their magic-tree land? I mean if the shadow is just chilling now that humanities gone? Would add a whole another layer of tragedy to their existence for sure😭😭.
Just speculation mind you😂😛.

Dance of Thorns

Chapter:19

Jan 03, 2022

I guess its part of the mystery but kinda odd how the inventor doesn't give our boi an allowance - That would give him a reason to keep Nisa and explain how he's currently affording....like anything😅😅.

My Life Is Already Bad...I Don't Need A Cat-Girl Making It Worse!!

Chapter:5

Jan 03, 2022

Hmmmmm, surprising and exciting to see a continuation - That said I think it migth be more engaging if you made the mother sympathetic, described the remourse she later came to feel.

Maybe seeing her daughter do so well would make her realise that her son could of also become Great.

Then when our boi gets his inevitable revenge it would be kinda tragic, the cycle of abuse and all that.

But maybe that's just me, either way good job😊👍.

A Christmas Sale

Chapter:2

Jan 03, 2022

To:Momentie

Oh and you can skip the prolouge and just read chapters 1-5

ALTaccounti's Roasting Book! (Reopened)

Chapter:2

Jan 03, 2022

To:ALTaccounti

Is there alot of censorship on here😂?

As for this roast thingy, your free to read either of my books. I'm always game for some fun. My short story is probably the better candidate for roasting as its less refined than my main work;

Book title: An Ode To Fallen Nemo
Mature: Yea
That gae energy: Not really, but there are lgbt characters in the series😅.

ALTaccounti's Roasting Book! (Reopened)

Chapter:2

Jan 03, 2022

Ummm what is GAE? As in like gay?

I suddenly feel very old and unhip😅😅

ALTaccounti's Roasting Book! (Reopened)

Chapter:2

Jan 03, 2022

My man this is great😂.

What an ass of a teacher and Chad of a class-rep😅.

I'd love to see more of this, a sort of class Vs the English teacher kinda thing.
It'd be a great way to sneak in all that grammer knowlage you have😁😄.

Classroom Tales

Chapter:1

Jan 02, 2022

To:ACHIEVE

Haha, you should see my timeline, I've about 5 different books in it and I ain't even half-way done the first one😂😂, aim high and all that😉😉.

I like the way you portrait the young sisters, it's quite good fun and very endearing.

Further showing the sad tragedy of how human they are before you inevitably start killing them off is great.
Good stuff😊😊

Dance of Thorns

Chapter:17