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aaa

Jun 21, 2023

I think you just took spawn camping to another level with this chapter.

Maniavolution

Chapter:4

Jun 21, 2023

To:kazesenken

I agree! I actually had a ton of difficulties with the first couple of lines. I'm not exactly sure how I want to fix it, but it's something for a final edit I think.

That Time I Was Reincarnated as the Villainess's Stat Menu and Tried to Get Her Attention

Chapter:2

Jun 21, 2023

To:Ducky123

I didn't want to sacrifice the realism of a dinner for making sure everyone "understood" the world I was trying to build. I'm glad you liked it and weren't too thrown off by the conversation!

That Time I Was Reincarnated as the Villainess's Stat Menu and Tried to Get Her Attention

Chapter:3

Jun 21, 2023

To:minatika

Yeah I'm really happy with how I've done Stefan and Vladimir. I wish I could give them more spotlight at times and hopefully I get that opportunity later in the story!

That Time I Was Reincarnated as the Villainess's Stat Menu and Tried to Get Her Attention

Chapter:3

Jun 20, 2023

This entire chapter was really funny, but I think my favorite is definitely Jason's reaction to being called a content creator. Very fluid, the puns are well placed and don't overwhelm you, I'm really liking this!

Maniavolution

Chapter:3

Jun 20, 2023

A nice sort of world building chapter. I'll admit that when I read "we do love amphibian monsters" I had a little bit of a chuckle because that kind of speech is mostly reminiscent of how we speak contemporaneously here.

The Mosaic Night

Chapter:2

Jun 20, 2023

Definitely relate to the way that Murasaki kinda calmed Issei down. I don't remember the exact technique here, but I actually find that this kind of sort of simple calming language is super useful for people who have a kind of trauma or anxious episode. Nicely presented!

Purple Prose

Chapter:4

Jun 20, 2023

I think with the high-level chuuni ethos you've built into the main character, I think "you're nothing more than a person" is definitely a lot funnier of a phrase than it normally would be. Just solid delivery here.

Pigeon on a Power Line

Chapter:2

Jun 20, 2023

I like the mention of double dates in the first half, I wonder how much of that is foreshadowing a moment when the mc tries to take their imaginary girlfriend on a double date with friends. Lots of fun possibilities!

Grace Dances Upon the Clouds

Chapter:2

Jun 20, 2023

Liking how you ground the audience by having the girl sort of echo the sentiments the reader might actually be thinking. The MC sort of breaking through some of his heightened prose to deliver a retort is also a nicely added flourish.

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:3

Jun 20, 2023

"Adhering to conventional employment logic" is a pretty amusing phrase, really liking the consistency with the way the narrator speaks and also monologues internally.

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:2

Jun 20, 2023

I do like the way that you appropriate all this like formal/prosaic wording into the actual dialogue of the main character. I think that sort of shock makes for good comedy. :)

Heartstrings and Horns

Chapter:1

Jun 20, 2023

There's a really strange surreal quality to the setting that you've made here, intriguing.

The Girl Over The Wall

Chapter:1

Jun 20, 2023

I definitely relate to the idea that even the most like normal thing like buying a different burger is a desperate attempt to shake up your normal/boring life.

Escapism

Chapter:2

Jun 20, 2023

Definitely enjoying the reserved quality you've given your MC, especially in the sense that they sort of live in their parents' shadow.

The Nerd's Love for the Popular Girl's Secret Indie Band

Chapter:3

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