Jun 19, 2023
One thing I like about your writing in these three chapters is your ability to change the velocity of it depending on the context. First two chapters? Paced with the ebbs and flows of a concert, the kind of back and forth between the musicians and the crowd, the tensions, etc. I like how this chapter kind of took us back and unwound a lot of it with some expository writing, more casual dialogue, etc. Good job! Keep going!!
