Jul 31, 2023
To:mfvice
Hmm thoughts so far đ¤ hrrrm!
I really do enjoy all these characters. They feel like friends with genuine interactions, it's warm and welcoming. These are the kinds of kids I would've loved to have had as my own friends in high school đ so it's nice to read about them and just get to join along in their daily experiences.
As a slice-of-life, this feels right on pace. It's a light hearted piece where I can just go to chill with each chapter!
If you were looking to go a bit more drama than slice-of-life, I think now would be the time to introduce those elements! đ I feel like you've set up a few possible points of conflict (Airi and Haru having different levels of feeling for each other. Kurokawa having a hard time with her beauty attracting the wrong ideas. Yuuji having some problems with his younger brother / family life.) With the vibe you've crafted for this story, I don't see any of these becoming major huge issues, but I could see them introducing some subtle drama into the plot~
