Aug 03, 2021
Your descriptive writing is very good, I truly enjoyed the beginning and how the MCs story starts to connect with the title of the novel. It's a story about the things he think, like the sun and its possible meanings, and how people interpret it, as mentioned in your summary.
I was a little bit confused with the dialogues because since they are in italics I can picture the characters talking but with no voice coming out from them. A little weird to explain but hear me out for a sec. Imagine a flashback scene, in a sepia tone and the dialogues being seen below like subtitles. It gave me a lukewarm, nostalgic feeling. However, since they are written with them em dash I can see the Spanish literature influence there, and even if it's very uncommon in English Literature, there are very few famous authors that use that style.
Ah yes, the grey sky. I got the reference.
In the end, the way the thoughts went from the sun, to his life, how that's a story for another time, as well as how Cho signified the end of his thoughts was quite poetic.
