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Hello! I used to be on Honeyfeed way back then but had to retire due to some personal stuff. Now I'm back and I hope to enjoy all these brand new changes and new additions the page has to add.
You can find me at RoyalRoad as well!
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Jul 19, 2021
To:Nanamar
No, No. I didn't mean your Prompt, I meant the Theme. Fantasy belongs to prompt 2, so please remove it and use a synonym in My Themes! You can go back to your previous Prompt!!
To:Aermas
You're welcome!
Hello, you are mix and matching. Fantasy belongs to Prompt #2. Please change it!
Hello, you are mix and matching themes. Supernatural belongs to prompt #3, pleade change it.
Since you are writing for the contest, please specify your chosen prompt and theme in the Author's Note section. If not, it will face disqualification
To:Emsora
You're welcome, keep it up!
Since you are writing for the contest, please specify your chosen prompt and theme in the Author's Note section, as well as writting a proper summary for your novel and title. If not, it will face disqualification.
Oh, nice cliffhanger. The Last Moon Festival lore was quite interesting as well, and Ven is a likeable protagonist so far. It's gripping, that's for sure, and your writing style is great!
A direct prologue, where we readers know nothing about what is going on and kind of follow what the characters are saying, in a way. So far, I like this air of mystery, since we don't know if they are good, bad, neutral, special, ordinary...!
As espected this hasyour trademark right in that classroom scene, won't elaborate on it (lol). Regardless, this was pretty good. We get to know every single character and how they relate to Emyria and Aystaria. We see relationships as well and how the world they live in came to be.
So far so good. I feel like Aystaria has so much to say and experience but has closed that side of her memories for her own good. Lys was cute and I feel tension between Reina and Aystaria when they talk, the romantic kind. The world-building is quite nice, and I want to know more about Emyria's family. One little thing tho, Maybe you should put the character's thoughts in italics? Sometimes I get confused if it's part of the narration or their thoughts, just me being dumb.
Right into the action, we go, and there is a contender for Snazzy, the battle shall be legendary! Ahem, anyway, good job Wolfy. I liked your intro, very action-packed and, even if I was unable to feel something towards Aystaria at first, in the end, I was able to feel her being terrified. Did this tentacle monster get inside of her? Interesting cliffhanger.
Jiro needs a hug.
This was really, really good. Brilliantly executed as well. The fight scene and reasoning was sub-par and it left the reader with eagerness to know more!
This back story is good, the foreshadowing was well executed as well!
