Apr 08, 2021
After your introduction, I nyoomed here to read your novel. So far so good for being a novice writer, we all start somewhere and so far this is great. Picked my interest super quickly. Try not to pressure yourself to write as quickly as possible since that can lead to severe exhaustion!
Back to the story itself, I find it quite interesting it has the premise of dreams (I got hooked by this since my novel has that as a thematic too), and how Yoichi was able to achieve it eventually, as well as the mysterious café. It seems the tall man has something to do with him suddenly losing consciousness, which makes me suspicious, alongside that ending sentence.
Good job so far, keep it up!
