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Hello! I used to be on Honeyfeed way back then but had to retire due to some personal stuff. Now I'm back and I hope to enjoy all these brand new changes and new additions the page has to add.
You can find me at RoyalRoad as well!
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Feb 06, 2021
I like how new characters get introduced and they all have something to add to the story. Be it simple banter, showing Yuuta's relationships with others and newer sides of his personality, as well as shading new lights into Yuuko's mystery.
Feb 02, 2021
To:K-J-Whitten
Oh okay! As always, I might be a bit dumb with stuff like that, sorry ;;
Feb 01, 2021
To:FADEX
I'm so sorry for just replying, I hate time management. There are lots of changes in time, and the current storytelling mechanic is going back and forth between past and present, that's why I indicate the day, month and year! And in regards to the fire dream. Is it now or is it not? Ho. Ho.
To:Rose’
I'm super sorry for just catching up with replies, cries. Well, there is a huge time gap in between and Yui has seen some /things/. Given her mental state is pretty broken at this point, as well as her identity, her mind is practically numb to the point of just trying to "get it over with" as soon as possible!
To:Nobodies17
Don't we all oh my god xD
Ah yes, this is indeed the type of thing I'm super into, you are slowly introducing this world of Witches and Warlocks and it seems almost everyone was part of it except for Joseph, poor lad. Narrating the stories from two perspectives is clever as well, making it a deuteragonist novel. It seems Ava is sus to Kalah.
Oh, this plot twist is very twisty. I dig the concept of the inhabitants of the Dream World knowing that their bodies will at any moment be taken over, and their souls disappear as they are reincarnated. They are mostly vessels waiting until the inevitable happens, which is very sad. They never know when their time might end, and that in itself is a very scary thought.
Magic huh? Ethereal Circle. I'm curious about them, about how the magic system works in your story given I write one as well! It's super nice to see different takes and perspectives. What I truly don't get though is, if Joseph gasped for air, doesn't that mean Kalah saved him? His heart is still beating, he isn't dead... so why try reincarnation? Or maybe I missed something.
Ah yes, this is what I live for, unexpected twists, where everything seems to be going alright, when you think the story has a sense of direction, the harsh abrupt change is something I truly enjoy. The whole talk about dreams was really interesting, and from there, there was a basis for the story, and how it could go, yet that ending turned everything around giving sense to the title, brilliant!
Huh, so that's the reason why Piper is how she is. I wonder what else will Tyler contribute to this scenario/situation she finds herself in, mentally speaking.
Piper is really confused, although so far I see her lacking personality ;; She seems to get flustered and attached easily to whoever shows concern for her, which isn't bad per se but in the long run that could be her doom. Things are escalating far too quickly and Aiden has been delegated to the wingman position.
Oh the friend drama.
Ah yes, the heartwarming route becomes true. Not much happened here, however, we got to see how Piper's relationships and world works by her outlook in regards to Aiden's friends. The whole thing was super overwhelming for her.
Hm.
I'll start with a suggestion, please bear with me ;; The story was a bit messy due to it's presentation. I had a hard time understanding what was happening between paragraph 3 and 4 due to the dialogues being just there. No space in between. Afterwards, I didn't quite grasp if what happened was a flashback while Piper was going to sleep, remembering how they met.
On the bright side, it's been a long time since I've read a girl-meets-boy and seems to be a really heartwarming story!
Short and straight to the point. Roy seems like an already fleshed out character, with ideas and worldviews. How will that change with the direction the story will take? Oh right, it also feel like some sort of diary or entry log due to the way he expresses himself, really nice!
