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Dec 22, 2021
YOU ARE FINE
Dec 18, 2021
This is amazing.
Dec 13, 2021
Bruh.😐
Nov 02, 2021
To:Deleted User
stfu
Nov 01, 2021
Sorry for taking so long but I'm finally starting this Though I'm not one to talk, but the writing definitely feels amateurish. There's nothing wrong with that. In fact, I think it fits the overall atmosphere of the story well. The start was good, nothing phenomenal, yet nothing outright bad about it. If I could voice out some other complaints, it'd be the tense shifting as well as punctuation. However, considering you're a newbie writer(I am too), this type of mistake is definitely really common. We've all suffered from it when we first begin our writing journey. The descriptions and vocabulary are also simple, not necessarily bad, I think it works well for this kind of story. To counterbalance all that, I really enjoyed this first chapter a lot. Well done Rinka-oneesan, this is good. There's a lot of potential being built upon in just this first chapter alone. Mysteries that intrigue and attract my attention. These types of stories aren't what I thought I'd enjoy much, yet Cat's Hour is proving against that. Let's see how the story unfolds from here, I am excited to read more. For now, I'll try to get my modules out of the way...lol.
Chapter 1 - 7/10
Oct 20, 2021
Okay, I would first off want to point out some errors. There was a lot of tense shifting in the chapter. This is like the most common mistake that every new writer makes, I suggest rereading your chapters a couple of times before posting. Stick with either past or present, not both.
From this first chapter alone, there are a lot of things to work on. 1. First chapter didnt interest me enough in the plot or the characters to properly hook me into reading more. -This is an important thing since readers usually won't have the patience to read more than one chapter. They'll read it, and if it doesn't interest them, they drop it and move on to the next. -The chapter didnt give me a reason to keep going or care for any of the characters. 2. The style of your writing feels too straightforward. - I won't comment on the style much, it's something you'll slowly get better at the more you write and find the style of write that suits you and the story you're trying to tell. 3. Too fast pacing. -Everything moves too fast that it leaves no breathing room. It makes the individual scenes feel very unnatural and disconnected. 4. The developments feel awkward and artificial. -I think in general, I think it'd be beneficial if you slowed down the pacing and focus on give characterization to each character rather than going from action to action where it all feels disjointed and weird.
Though those are just my opinions. It's up to you if you'll decide to consider them or not, I'm just one reader after all.
Oct 12, 2021
Bruh lmfao. This was great.
Oct 07, 2021
Two Points So-so maturity not gae
Roast Two Points
Oct 03, 2021
Chapter Ratings and Thoughts
Chapter 2 - Hype fight next chapter. I like how you give tidbits of Lev's backstory and Astri's motivations. Some nice foreshadowing here. Metahumans huh, nothing unique, basically just people with superpowers but that ain't bad at all. Pierce seems pretty cool, I like him.
Rating: 7/10
Chapter 3 - Nice action. Fights go brrr.
Rating: 8.5/10
Chapter 4 - The plot is thickening and I'm loving it. I like Pierce a heck of a lot more now. Quill is a cool character too.
Rating: 8/10
Chapter 5 - Some nice action here.
Rating: 7.5/10
Chapter 6 - Okay, Quill is badass and all but if that coin flip resulted in heads, I would rate this chapter a 5/10 of lower. I like Priscilla, I feel bad for her, her dad is a piece of a shit.
Chapter 7 - Another pretty good chapter. It was tense and exciting.
Chapter 8 - More fights and that cliffhanger tho.
Chapter 9 - Sucks for Astri. The chapter was a good change of pace from all the constant fights.
Chapter 10 - I actually enjoy these slow, dialogue-heavy chapters a lot more than some of the fights.
Chapter 11 - Another great non-action chapter, I actually think it's the 2nd best chapter so far. I liked the conversation between Lev, Quill and Pierce in the grave. Sucked that Pierce is dead, or gonna be dead now, but it was bound to happen. I'm assuming an action packed climax is what's gonna come in the final third of UnCrowned.
Rating: 9.5/10
Chapter 12 - The beginning of the end. The beginning of the final battle. Though, I will say, Khan? Necrophilia? What the fuck man. Just wondering, is he canonically gay for Pierce? Man he seems so dead inside this chapter. I like the grayness every character has, not strictly black and white, I like it that way. Feels more realistic.
Chapter 13 - Fight begins. We got the battle plan meeting as well as the Poseidon stuff. It was pretty good actually.
Chapter 14 - Epic climactic final battle. Sheeeeeeeeeeeeeeeesh.
Chapter 15 - And it ends. Setting up with Priscilla seems interesting, I really like her. But dude, is this BL? tf was that dream sequence in the end.
Rating: 9/10
To:Sevenlock
3 chapters left to read. Prepare for my short overall review in like 5 hours.
Oct 02, 2021
Fantastic first chapter, probably the best one in HF that I've read so far, which isn't a lot but doesn't make this chapter any leas good. I like the premise here, it's simple for now but from the reveal towards the end with Sehyun, things will get crazier from here. The setting is great. I liked the way you made use of show not tell for indirect worldbuilding for this Minerva place, like with the receptionist guy at the beginning—from that very first line in the chapter alone, it intrigued me. The way you described the receptionist dude gripping the shotgun, it not only gave characterization for him alone but also sets the mood for Minerva—from that first sentence alone, you can already infer just what kind of place Minerva was, good job. Next, I want to say that the dialogue is amazing, there's really nothing else I can say. Your pacing strikes a perfect balance, there was never a single moment in the chapter where I felt bored nor felt was moving too fast. The flow of your prose is really smooth, it keeps me engaged that I just want to keep reading the next page, the page after, then the page after that. The characters so far are very interesting, they all feel 'unique'? is the best word I can put it. You rely on their words and actions to provide subtle characterization. An intriguing plot, and I like the mystery you are setting up right now. Absolutely amazing job with this first chapter and I hope it only continues to get better from here.
Rating: 10/10
Oct 01, 2021
English plz
Sep 18, 2021
poggers
sreggop
Though I'm not one to talk, but the writing definitely feels amateurish. There's nothing wrong with that. In fact, I think it fits the overall atmosphere of the story well. The start was good, nothing phenomenal, yet nothing outright bad about it. If I could voice out some other complaints, it'd be the tense shifting as well as punctuation. However, considering you're a newbie writer(I am too), this type of mistake is definitely really common. We've all suffered from it when we first begin our writing journey. The descriptions and vocabulary are also simple, not necessarily bad, I think it works well for this kind of story. To counterbalance all that, I really enjoyed this first chapter a lot. Well done Rinka-oneesan, this is good. There's a lot of potential being built upon in just this first chapter alone. Mysteries that intrigue and attract my attention. These types of stories aren't what I thought I'd enjoy much, yet Cat's Hour is proving against that. Let's see how the story unfolds from here, I am excited to read more. For now, I'll try to get my modules out of the way...lol. 
